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for Bobbing for Apples

by PureFluff

schedule May 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really love your story since the beginninng! Did really Light doubt the gender of L?
Anyway the lemon was really hot!
let's see what will happen next...
person animekid
schedule April 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
still reading this in spurts but it's still funny how L thinks of everything

hope you get over those stupid writing/net issues :3
schedule April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awwwe. Poor L, poor Raito. So close and yet so far. I liked how he found Whammy's though.
=)
schedule April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awwww... that was probably the best ever inner-L monologue I can remember reading. Perfect. Looking forward to more.
schedule April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awwweee... poor L. I feel bad for him. I hope Light finds him soon. I can't wait for the nest chapter.
=)
schedule April 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yes another good chapter. Maybe if you plan on putting the sex at the end you could get in some limeish scenes along the way. You can do other things before doing the actual act that's what makes it so fun. ^_^ keep it up.

-L
schedule April 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ohhhhh very nice story I quite like it. You have a good way with your wording and it flows well. Please do update soon and maybe they can actually get around to the sex part that would be entertaining.Keep up the good work.

-L
schedule April 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sorry I sounded so harsh! I come from corners of the internet where one gets used to harshness, so I forget sometimes that a lot of people aren't.

Anyway, on the bright side, the story reads a lot better now, and I'm very interrested to see what happens, so I'll keep reading. :)
person animekid
schedule April 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
O_o

most strange plot mix ever

I like it though; it's hilarous that raito doesn't know that L is a guy fufufufu.

the lemonly parts and situations fit and this is a treat to read *look at it again*
schedule April 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Love this can't wait for more*smiles*

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