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March 6, 2010 at 12:00 AM
it's an interesting idea, but doesn't read like a finished work. it's more like your outline. each paragraph could be it's own chapter. begin with his history and then flash forward to when Yuki starts to suspect. what are they doing? why is there no dialog until the end of the 2nd chapter?
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October 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
great story update soon if possible
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May 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nice start. Like it.