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July 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Alright - first things, first. Comments/Reviews should be honest and not be done as flames. I agree. I don't agree however with being told not to say bad things.
Critical criticism is what helps you learn and grow as a writer. Not all critical criticism is bad - and thus it is not a flame.
In light of this, I did read your fic. I had issues reading it because you have one really large paragraph. It would be easier on the reader to break it into multiple paragraphs. I will be completely honest and say that I was not able to read it as well as I would have liked.
You have a great idea. It shows depth, but hard to read. I would love to re-read this or see more of your work.
Critical criticism is what helps you learn and grow as a writer. Not all critical criticism is bad - and thus it is not a flame.
In light of this, I did read your fic. I had issues reading it because you have one really large paragraph. It would be easier on the reader to break it into multiple paragraphs. I will be completely honest and say that I was not able to read it as well as I would have liked.
You have a great idea. It shows depth, but hard to read. I would love to re-read this or see more of your work.