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i love this story

HAHA! I love these kinds of Love Hina fics. They're the best in my opinion.

chapter 3: good chapter

Tsuruko, Motoko, and Keitaro have a go to see if he will make those two his wife's also. Now that would be something very nice to see. How about Shinobu give's up her pure area to Keitaro to show him that she love's him also. I think that is it for now. If I come up with anything else I'll do up another one.

chapter 2- wow that was really hot it look keitaro is going to die a happy man

Great Story, can't wait to read more.

One of the few stories i've seen with such a big focus on Su and her family. You've done a pretty good keeping things fresh and keeping them all in character. I'll be looking forward to more, so please keep up the good work.

Well, I know what Kei feels like now...seriously I nearly died when I finally...yeah, it was THAT hot. Can't wait for Nyamo's appearence, loving the way you're making the Aoyama's love it up the arse, can't wait for the young tigress that is Motoko. The OC's are absolutely fantastic, your exposition of their stories is measured well, not revealing too much at the start or at once is something most writer's can resist, it's admirable that you're doing so well. Keep this up, Kitsune's scene promises to be great too, if you've ever read the story 'Weapon of Mass Destruction' on here you'll see why, she's a damn nymph, laid back, cool and slinking around like a lazy cat or fox, I can imagine her being very warm and snuggly seductive, if you know what I mean. Plus her tits are beautiful.

Keep it up mate!

This is one of the best lemons I've ever read

...........................damn. this chapter is HOT!!!!!!!!!!! Every sentence, every word...pure genius! i'd even go as far to say i was jealous of how well you're doing with this story. But i'd much rather praise you for it. so here it goes
1) Brilliant idea having Asuna actually be related to Motoko and Tsuroko and bonus points for having Asuna call Tsuroko Tsu-chan. that's so cute.
2) Yuna is a total babe. the description of her is great and i love how she's dominant over Kotomi.
3) I loved the end parts showing each of the girl's in theri respective rooms. each one was enjoyable to read and was good for the plot as a whole in my opinion. i especially loved the interaction Su had with Shinobu. Shinobu is so cute i can barely stand it!

As for other girls, i approve of the mothers, Mei, definately Nyamo and Sarah and i would like to see Motoko's groupies somehow get involved. that is if you feel like it, honestly i'd like it either way.

This made my night and now i'm pumped and have to start writing in the little time i've got left before i need sleep. cannot wait to see the next chapter you write, but until it's done i shall wait patiently for it. It's totally worth waiting for.

Descendant of the shadows
-Twisteddarkness