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Epilogue plz
No seriously, I want to see an epilogue....
Please return to write it...

Nicely written Fanfiction, at least out of my german POV.
But where's my aftermath? I'm really waiting for the epiologue, since there are so much loose ends to close. :)

Do you think you'll be making a sequel for this story?

well done. This was the darkest chapter yet, and very well written. I actually growled a few times when the guys hurt Rob.....very well done indeed. -WWMH-

I'm getting worried. I hope that Rob and Gardevoir will be okay. I consul myself by thinking that the story will probably have a happy ending, but it looks like there's going to be a bumpy road there.

I only just caught wind of this story, but I must admit, having read the chapters fairly close together, it's clear that your writing style has improved dramatically since you started this piece. The story elements seem more fleshed out and the dialogue is much more easy to follow. I'll look forward to the next chapter with bated breath. Five Stars Sir.

Well, nicely written. I'm glad that they were able to finally make their relationship more or less official. That of course at least partially concludes the initial romance arc (though that chapter is I'm sure far from over), now we're onto the multiple parties that do not have good intentions for the group. I'm very eager to see what you come up with for that; you are an impressive writer. With most writers that include Pokemon lemons, their stories are fairly transparent excuses to put together said lemons, and even with the ones that aren't, they generally are not well written or developed. Both of your stories blow that kind of thinking out of the water.

Also, do you have a ballpark estimate of how many chapters until we get an idea of what's wrong with Gardevoir?

Beautifully written as always, Twill. It's inspiring to see how Gardevoir changes from such a miserable creature into the fierce beauty she's become. Not to mention Rob's reaction to her. It adds a very subtle hint of realism and makes the story more believable, since not every human would go running into a relationship with their Pokemon, throwing sanity and caution to the wind as I usually have my characters do. That being said, it appears they're being observed again. I have a feeling this story is about to get very interesting. Anyway, keep up the excellent work, I look forward to reading more. ^_^ -WWMH-

I love this story. I read it all in one go, and im wondering its been a month since an update so is a new chapter in progress. Info would really be apreciated.

I can give no greater praise then the fact that I stayed up till four in the morning to read straight from chapter one to chapter eight. It was an Impeccable read. It isn't perfect and could use some tweaking, but I think at it's core it's a solid piece of work. It's interesting and makes me want to keep reading, and every story needs that. However, I don't feel as much an emotional connection to the story in the beginning as I do by chapter eight. I feel in the beginning everything is flat and 2 dimensional. The bad guys are bad just to be bad, and Kirlia and Abra are in love to set up for his cliched death and unlocking of Kirlia's hidden power. Absol all is a demented antagonist that has so much potential, but falls flat like a cartoon villain rather than a true picture of blood lust and madness. She never seems psychotic to me, merely the cartoon bully picking on the weak. Absol is described as insane enough that I wish there were more signs of her wicked unhinged nature. I wish her dialogue contained more giggling or mania. When threatening Kirlia I felt her dialogue sounded more like it belonged to Zoroark and his loyalty to Wes rather than an uhinged mad woman who just wanted an excuse to hurt some thing.
My minor nitpicks aside the tale is quite engrossing, after I finish this review I will probably go back and read the rest of the chapters in one straight shot. They're quite good, and I hope you keep working to improve. The talent for story telling is there, and it's wonderful.