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Okay that was a good chapter, I liked it from the title to the end, except where it ended. (This is where I would normally type out the frown-face EMO but for some reason that makes all the text you write after it disappear when you click the review button)

you may also want to know that I spotted what appeared to be three mistakes. The first was at the bus stop in the human world where you left the T out of stop. The second was: "Just sitting next to him is keeping the flames lit" I know it's a bit on the technical side but shouldn't that be was instead of is? And the third mistake: "On her shoulder, Kou the bat, Kokoa’ ever-present familiar/weapon" I believe you left the s off of Kokoa's

I'm actually glad that you brought Kokoa into the story it's a good way to get that bike explained. Though knowing you she won't get added to Tsukune's harem even though she starts to fall for him toward the end of season two. (Personally I like strawberries) lol

anyway can't wait to see how this thing continues to develop! TTYL

So now there is a cliffhanger and I must wait a whole week for the next chapter.

You sure know how to keep my attention. Well done.

This was a good chapter. The anticipation for the next is almost unbearable.

I am curious though. Will Kokoa be a part of his harem? I vote for yes since there are not many stories that involve Tsukune and her.

Keeping up hope for that one. Good job.

I don't know where this story will be heading now but I Really Really REALLY hope that Kokoa becomes involved in his harem!

She is just too cute to pass up!

I really hope you consider adding her!

Sorry I didn't get a chance to review before now, I've been a bit busy. I enjoyed this chapter a good deal. It's not as descriptive as I like things but very passionate. I was surprised by Moka biting him and thought it was a nice touch bringing out that aspect of her character. I do hope that later in the story you explain why exactly it happened, I'm really curious. I'm also desperate to find out the reaction of other Moka… You do realize that Tsukune just busted a nut in her without wearing a condom or should I say in them without wearing a condom. It's understandable that inner Moka might overlook something like that, seeing as how she lacks worldly experience, but Tsukune should have known better and if they get pregnant other Moka will be passed.

This chapter turned out better than I could have hoped.

Good job.

This was very touching.

I am impressed.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

I really enjoyed this chapter. I was surprised that the bloodplay was minor considering that Tsukune is a half vampire.

I suppose it just couldn't go beyond that for the moment.

Either way, awesome job.

this chapter is a good set up for the next chapter. I agree that moka needed to come to terms with her feelings for Tsukune, however I think we're watching the show what she really wanted was for him to take the initiative to be aggressive and assertive. we'll see how things go in the next chapter.

I have said it before and I will say it once again....you are a god-damned TEASE!

This explains a lot from the previous chapter and now I can see the reason behind Inner Moka's hesitation.

You have redeemed yourself with this chapter. Excellent job.