That grammar :DD
Great chapter, though maybe you can try to make your sex scenes more detailed.Can you also perhaps add Rossweisse, Grayfia, Venelena, Gabriel, Xenovia&Irina. As for Rias, can you have her be used as a prostitute by crminals and other dregs of society for extremely rough sex?
Hey there!
Yes, I liked the style in this story a lot more, and I appreciate you making an effort and editing everything. I have to admit though that I have no clue about DxD so I am a bit lost in the story. I'll have to read the manga or whatever once I have some more time.
I'm not all that fond of the monster stuff though (as in the not human kind), that never really was my thing. Again, once you get a spellchecker this will be great. Maybe I'm alone with that but typos distract me while reading and stop me from enjoying the story to it's fullest. Personally I am using 'Grammarly', so maybe you want to check it out or something. (I don't know if it works on phones though.)
Once I familiarized myself a bit more with the dxd universe I'll be back for more, so keep up the good work.
Maybe add Ophis to the harem?