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By : rowen
  • From Dragon7 on August 16, 2007
    Grate chapter!!!! I'm so happy that you are back and writing again. I can’t wait to read the next chapter so please keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.
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  • From Nanaka on August 16, 2007
    YAY an update... I don't mind having to wait as long as yo do updae eventually... otherwise i turn into crazy stalker girl, hehe... well i loved this chapter, keep up th good work, i'll be waiting patiently for you're next update
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  • From ShiniKitsune on May 29, 2007
    this story is so good! its alot better than some of the other saiyuki stories i've read. and i agree with you about Hakkai and his smile. it gets pretty tiring always having to picture him with that smile pastered to his face, like he's got premature rigor mortis or something. i can't wait for your next chapter! keep going!
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  • From Robyn on May 20, 2007
    Okay, just finished with chapter 9. FINISH!!!!! The UST is killin' me!


    Oh, yeah, and this is an excellent story. The flow of events and thoughts is easy to follow.
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  • From Robyn on May 19, 2007
    I was going to wait until I finished reading what you have written (excellent so far by the way!!!!) But this:

    Dear god, it was a war zone. And Hakkai had never felt so perfectly content in all his twenty years of life. Perhaps he’d won this war…


    OMG...I have found parts of this story amusing, yes, and I know this is not necessarily supposed to be a comedy, but THAT was hairlarious!

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  • From menuriko on May 10, 2007
    I must agree with you; you write excellent. ^_^ Sure, I'm not a native English speaker, but I often pick up others mistakes. Well, yeah... Anyway I like people with confidence, people who know what they are capable of, and what they are not so skilled at.

    I love stories about Gojyo and Hakkai's first time living together, and this story was no exception.

    First chapter: Interesting this. When the size of their penises are commented most authors seems to describe Hakkai's as the largest. Don't know why really. And of course, for the purpose of Hakkai's curiosity in this story, it's necessary to let Gojyo have the biggest one. At least while Hakkai is in human form. ^_^ But I must say, I think Hakkai is a little silly thinking that size matters that much. The skill of the man is of much more importance, unless it's too small (but than it has to be really tiny).

    Second chapter: It made me laugh, Hakkai's thoughts when he woke up with Gojyo snuggled behind him. Right, 'not all that uncomfortable'. Hakkai, Hakkai. You showed Hakkai's inner turmoil well, in all his inner monologues.

    Third chapter: Oops, here appeared, for the first time in this story, something to complain about: An author's note in the middle of the story! That is a no-no! If you wanted to make sure the reader understood Hakkai was referring to Sanzo's language, you should have written something like: "And the mouth on that man! What language!" An author's note in the middle disturbes the flow of the text and looks very non-professionell. It's a pity to make this lovely story into something less than it deserves.
    Otherwise the chapter was as good as the others. Ha, I liked how Gojyo 'the morning after' had lost all interest in the woman.

    Fourth chapter: Are you making this into a Gojyo/Sanzo fic? Strange how that pairing seems to be the most popular in the Saiyuki fandom here at AFF. It's not my favorite pairing by a long shot, but it's more important to me if the story is well written, like this is.
    Your description of Hakkai's struggle to understand his youkai form is both believable and sort of endearing. Nice cliffhanger, too. I like those. ^_^

    Fifth chapter: Still silly Hakkai, having to compare himself to Gojyo.
    Did he really become full youkai by removing just one earcuff? Anyway, it was good you let him do some control practicing first, not many authors think about that.
    Hm, now this seems more like it will be a Gojyo/Hakkai pairing at the end of this fic. (More to my liking I must say.)

    Sixth chapter: Wild, sexy Hakkai. Frustraded, angry (and sexy) Gojyo. Yummie.

    Seventh chapter: It's possible to use italics in the stories. Hm, I have to find out how.
    What! Stupid, stupid, Hakkai! Of course, you have to explain! Poor Gojyo.

    Eighth chapter: Gojyo must really be extremely desperate if he's confiding in Sanzo like this. And Sanzo sees through it and react in his own characteristical way. By the way, I think Hakkai found Hakuryu a few months after he had moved in with Gojyo. There is a radio show about that event.

    Ninth chapter: Wow, a grammar mistake! The first sentence "Hakkai almost wished he were a religious man." Should be "was", of course. (Have you noticed how many was/were mistakes there are in Harry Potter?)
    Lubrication for masturbation? What for? The only reason would be that he's circumcised. But why would he be that? He's not jewish or a muslim, so he would hardly be circumcised.
    So, when are they going to tell each other their secrets? I hope it will be soon. And what will happen when Hakkai remove the other ear cuffs? So many questions.


    The story made me smile in many places. You write this kind of humour that does not make the story hilarious, but still make the reader feeling warm and happy. I hope you continue soon.
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  • From Nanaka on April 13, 2007
    yay... I'm so happy for the update... and i don't mind having to wait for the next chapter just as long as you don't go awhole year without updating... then i'd have to resort to stalking... hehe... loved the chapter and will patiently be awaiting the next one
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  • From on April 01, 2007
    Nice, very nice xD
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  • From teacupprincess14 on March 23, 2007
    poor sanzo. he needs an asrin..or a good fuck... *hem*

    love this story ^_^
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  • From vampslyr on March 21, 2007
    [Snicker] sounds like Sanzo needs a massage; or some other form of stress relief. Seems Gojyo has an unusual definition of what falls under 'stress relief'. Thanks for updating, this is one of my favorite fics.

    I thought of an interesting way for Hakkai and Hakuryu to meet to fit in with the story. If one were to surmise that dragons, being magical creatures, were attracted to power, then Hakkai in his full youkai form will likely put out an incredibly strong youki. Then curious little Hakuryu might decide to follow Hakkai around to see what other kind of interesting things that power will attract.
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  • From jayree05 on March 21, 2007
    yay! update! I really like how you wrote Sanzo. It seemed natural. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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  • From TrulyWished on March 12, 2007
    Aw, poor things. I'll try to watch for teh next chapter! *I tend to forget to check anything other than my own fandom*
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  • From TrulyWished on March 12, 2007
    SO funny! I love it and I have to finish it right away!
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  • From teacupprincess14 on February 24, 2007
    "from the bathroom with a towel around his waste" waist!

    but I like this! i definitely want to see more!
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  • From Nanaka on February 23, 2007
    Yay, another lovely chapter! I can't wait to read the next one!
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