Adult-FanFiction.org : Anime

Reviews for Tear You Apart

By : Duomi

From Dotowe on August 14, 2008
I have to tell you, when I read "moving in an oddly loping way" I threw my head back and laughed louder than I have in months, the image of Ken-ichi Matsuyama running towards the airplane in the "L, Change the World" trailer instantly coming to mind! Yes, that was a cruel cliffhanger. Aiber, huh? I lways liked him. I wonder if Wedy will be close by in future chapters. *wink*

I absolutely loved that little moment when L and Light meet eachother's eyes in the rearview mirror of the taxi. It seemed so, I don't know, intimate. And comical. I quiet sort of dry humor shared between the two. Almost like that scene in "The Incredibles" (I'm a dork, shoot me) when Flash's teacher is accusing him of putting a tack on his chair to Flash's mom and there's this sort of...long-suffering look that she takes on adn Flash is just trying not to laugh. Defeatist, almost--on L's part; but at the same time, very intimate.

And, yes, I punched the air in victory when Light got shot. I thoroughly enjoyed that too. You write action very well, by the way. Fast paced, but not so quick that you don't know what's going on. Glass exploding, bullets, L lope-running...

Can't wait for more!
~Gloria
Report Review
From PlantangelJchan on August 14, 2008
Hey Doumi long time no see. Awesome chapter this tiem around even though it was a bit on the short side short can be just as good as long ones. Yikes now they're both injured whatever will they do now?......ok so yeah I have a confession to make I was forced to scrap the drawing I had previously started because my cat knocked my soda all over it so I have decided to paint you something instead. I've gotten more into painting lately(Hellagoddess's fault) , so I've discovered I'm quite enjoying putting things to canvas instead of paper. I'm not sure when I'll have it done but i'll make it somehting good. Well once again great chapter and see you next one.

-L
Report Review
From ANON - Heretic on August 14, 2008
Ooo, I love when stories update! I usually don't review because well.. I don't know what to say. I haven't been reading the story for too long, but it's a great story, and I love it. I eagerly await and new chapter ^_^
Report Review
From animekid on August 07, 2008
The Winchester Mad Bombings as well as how L ended up defeating three famous detectives and something about WW3 (???) was definatly in another note and I was angsting on how they DIDN'T make a book out of this....so many death note plot holes about L that it isn't even funny....it's frustrating as hell.

Still good chapter; it would be funny if Kira found out about L's name since the death note doesn't work on him anymore XD Oh and if L ended up joining Kira it would be under strange cirumstances......really odd ones.

I'm embrassed about the artwork; it wasn't no big deal since I'm sasuke emo like out lately from overwork. I'm reading this and shades of myst as well...*Really like both stories* I really wanted to do something with near but I haven't drawn him before....

*Still plays video games too much like matt-kun*
Report Review
From ANON - SP777 on July 31, 2008
about #11...

New reader in the house!!!

I was reading this and an image popped into my head, with a scenario that ran
amuck until I had to mention it.

I don't know if anyone has ever wrote this, I DO doubt it, BUT have you ever entertained the notion of doing a story with Sayu & Near, with a reluctant
friendship developing between them.

I'm really tempted into putting out a challenge to the authors and see if they can
do a story where an older Near is Head of NPA [?] & Sayu becomes an officer in
a Japan Division, following her father's footsteps. Then, a case suddenly has
them working together.

I could go on & on, but it would be up to the authors to make a plausible plot.

What do you think?
Report Review
From chrissysky on July 29, 2008
I really like your fic. To tell the truth, I haven't been able to get into DN, but your writing style and characterization is really enjoyable. ^^
Report Review
From Hellagoddess on July 20, 2008
Eeee! An update! *this is my excited face* I think it's more exciting when you update because I never know when it's going to come - whereas with set ones like mine there's no...real anticipation cause you know it's going to be there! Liked this chapter a lot - I am typing this with one hand and actually drawing a scene from this chapter with the other! (also playing invisible chess! okay...it's actually on the screen but STILL! Go go multi-tasking!)

I'm actually liking Sayu a bit in this - I really loved her remembering Raito when she was younger, makes me go BAWWWWWWW! - and the humanization of Near was wonderfully done. You're actually causing me to like the little bugger a tiny bit - and that, my dear friend, is a MASSIVE ACHIEVMENT OF EPIC PROPORTIONS! I like your listless L. Every time you write about him I can see him just sitting there with his head tilted to the side like that scene where he was depressed in the series - very cute :)

Oooh dun dun DUN - come on Watari! Let them go! I can't wait to see what he does with the information! After watching 'L-Change The World' a few nights back - I have the biggest soft spot for Watari now - I cried through most of that movie, he does L so well and just all the sad looks and stressful situations and the emotion and BAWWWWWWWWWWWWW....

...it was a bit too much for me.

Though the bit at the end was a bit too cheesy, it still made me smile.

Can't wait for the next chapter - like REALLY CAN'T wait!

ADDITIONAL NOTE: Psh and hurry up and reply to my email! I'm in a drawing mood and this fanart (if it's ever completed) won't entertain me FOREVER!
Report Review
From PlantangelJchan on July 20, 2008
Yay another great chapter! I kow i've probly said that before, but every chapter you write keeps me on the edge of my seat and wanting more! Oh and some rather humourous funny stuff for you. I tried yesterday to buy a box of sugar cubes at the store and my mom swiped them back out of thebasket and put them back telling me I was going to die of a sugar overdose. It was funny and actually made me think of L and Watari so I think I'm going to draw that for you. I can picture it a lot better in my head and it'll be cuter. But yeah I loved this chapter keep it up!

-L
Report Review
From sharingan on July 18, 2008
I love Matsuda's reaction to Sachiko! It's hilarious, and so characteristic for him. Poor possessive Soichirou, haha. I also think you did an especially great job at characterizing Sayu. She doesn't really get much screen time, and I always find that secondary characters like that are difficult to nail down, but I really like the way she comes across. She's still cheerful and energetic (or at least is making an obvious effort at it), and is still completely possessive of her brother (even knowing he's Kira) and her family, as her behavior towards Near shows. It really is interesting that someone like that would be Light's sister, and would keep supporting him even if she doesn't support Kira's actions. Must be hard for her.

Very interesting dialogue from L in this chapter, regarding how he has already got the capacity to become a murderer, and already has the power and intelligence to accomplish that. That's a good point. I've heard the argument made that Light was corrupted by acquiring that power, and that the same would happen to anyone like that, but it doesn't seem to have happened to L, and to a degree he is in the same position. Though maybe the difference isn't in his sense of morality (because that's not exactly pure), but in the way he was raised? Hmm.

Light's response felt very solid, too, in regard to L doing the same thing as Kira had been doing by arranging for himself to be the one making all the decisions. I love dialogue like that; it's very accurate at conveying a character's personality, and it's very convincing, as it should be.

Also, I still like that L is the one losing sleep over all of this, when obviously Light is the one taking lives and treading the line of morality (to such an extent, anyway). But there's no such visual impact the case is having on Light; L is the one suffering over it. I think that says a lot about both of them. I also like that it ties very neatly back into that chapter of GM where the early-manga L appeared for a while. Maybe L's tenuous acceptance of his and Light's similarities will bring back that old L eventually. Either way, good thing he's cheered up a bit; I doubt he could get much done sitting around all depressed all the time. Though so far it looks like Light is going to be the one to convince L of his methods rather than the other way around, although somehow I can't see L outright supporting that sort of murder.

Hmm, I wonder why Watari wanted that information about Light. Maybe he's going to try to appeal to his sense of humanity, or come up with some plan involving Sayu? He's got the approximate location of L and Light now, anyway, so he's definitely got a chance. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Report Review
From animekid on July 08, 2008
Finally.....did it....here's the damn linku

http://kaith-sith.deviantart.com/art/The-game-of-life-and-death-91070063

but actually been busy working, going to funerals, and just dealing with the suck of not being able to write fanfiction :( But the good thing is that you updated and it actually made my day better.

I would have to be the closest in terms of personality and habits: Matt. I actually play video games as much as him! And I also am not the most genius or shining a lot (He only appeared like....for a minute in the manga,) but shockingly make impacts, (people love the heck of him.) Matt kun was good in technology shocking like me; the only thing is that I don't smoke at all :B

I'll try to make some more but it's hard finding a scanner...and I am drawing a lot lately too! I loved this chapter with stephan in it! Heheheh he's picking up people's bad habits!

The Matt and Mello interaction is always a treat and every chapter so far isn't dissapointing at all (Some stories have meh parts but I haven't found one yet so far...that's pretty good considering.)
Report Review
From Emyrei on June 24, 2008
I really really really really like this story.
I read this and GM today...I hope you update soon. Because this is getting exciting.
Report Review
From HawkChic on June 20, 2008
Well, I wouldn't call him a Renfield, more of a Mina, perhaps? I'm not too sure... I actually have most of the plot planned out, I just need to find the proper title and such then I'm all set to go! (But first I have to finish Snapshots and Strength of Heart.) But I hope that I've caught your interest in it enough to warrant a read? I am getting back into the groove of writing, sorry if this review is late, I only just thought to check it now... stupid diplomas...

BUT I ADORED THE CHAPTER.

Haha, I simply LOVED that interaction between Matt and Mello; it seemed incredibly in-character and plausible to me. I laughed at their interaction; that sort of thing makes my day and the fact that I have a diploma in a few hours much more bearable. I shall take this in with me to laugh silently at and to keep me going! YOU SHALL BE AN INSPIRATION.

As well, I know the feeling about the writing thing. Life interferes, and you feel that you're not quite good enough. But you've gotta continue for, not only yourself, but others reading your stuff. I've figured that out; you gotta write cause you enjoy it, and if you have people who wanna read it. If you find yourself an audience, play 'em for all they're worth! I shall give you cookies in order to make you feel better! *hands you a huge box of homemade Rolo cookies*

Oh, and am I one of the few who saw Prince Caspian and thought that Caspian/Peter is made of WIN?!

Anyways, loved the chapter and can't wait to read more! Mwuhahaha.

Viridian Kat.
Report Review
From ANON - Lila on June 19, 2008
So yeah i had to skim read this chapter i'm in th middle of moving so yeah lots of mello matt interactions which i believe always is freakin hilarious :) i'm glad you decided to continue *wipes away the cold sweat that developed at thought of Discontinued TYA* So loyal fan that i am i will be pleased with where ever you take this story because you are definitely talented XD...So can i just applaud you not only for your writing skill but you always reply to your reviewers and not many people on the website do and it's appreciated that my appreciation is appreciated...If that makes any sense so yeah it has been awhile sense an update i'll probably go back through and reread TYA and maybe even go back to the begining of Goodnight Moon there both really so wonderful and to refresh about what has happened in this AU's past...So yeah look forward to the update promise to read this chap more thoruoghly later but yeah just kept the coputer hooked up long enough to check for an update heh so hopefully read the story next week after the move ne :)
Report Review
From Hellagoddess on June 18, 2008
TWO chapters?! How did I miss one? Am I that absent-minded or senile in my old age? (or perhaps I just don't check the page as often as I should >.>) I APOLOGISE PROFUSLEY! Here - have an extra large review from me :P *indulgent smile*

I absolutely loved the chapter with L and Light - you've got them down in a way that's so perfect and right that it makes me so envious sometimes. Reading your characterizations makes me want to strive for better ones when I write - I laughed out loud at Light folding his and L's clothes and then washing his hands afterwards. It just suits him for too much - I really think it should become a 'canon' habit for him to have in fanfiction, lol! I liked L freaking out about being eaten and the fact that Ryuuk didn't even know if shinigami could eat humans - he's so clueless but so calculating and intelligent at the same time. It makes me think sometimes that he was far more onto it than he's usually depicted - actually being a god and all...

The next chapter was brilliant! I've aboslutely fallen in love with your Matt and Mello in this chapter. I was actually taking notes as I read so I could mention all the bits that I liked so much. First up was Matt, so desperate to play his game, that when he fell sideways, he was still playing and didn't even attempt to get up - that whole opening scene was such a clear picture and described beautifully - you should be really proud! Looking down at my notes, my brain must have detached briefly as I've just scribbled down one-word mentions, hoping that it will jog my memory when writing the review - so far I can see that I've written 'Brilliant' 4 times in the list - mingled with a fair chunk of 'hilarious', 'love Matt', and one 'Mello upside down'. I have no idea what that last one is referencing but obviously the picture was there in my head and I felt the need to mention it to you... Don't ask - it's been a long week!

Oh! One last bit on the list - I couldn't stop laughing at the 'nostalgic for Zelda' part. Seriously. I couldn't answer the phone when it rang and had to wave me hand madly at Liz to answer it instead. I really shouldn't be reading at work regardless - but I love it!

So I can happily say - two absolutely amazing chapters - I can't wait for the next one! *hugs*
Report Review
From Kaiyuke on June 17, 2008
Hrm, so the story's moving along nicely. I hate to say this but I think I'm actually a bit confused now. What in the world is going to happen next? XD

*flails*
Report Review