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From agrajagthetesty on January 25, 2010
Chapter 21: Oh� oh my god. I don�t know what to say, I really don�t. That sex� it was amazing. So intense and awesome, and it actually made me feel like I�m kind of vanilla even though I�ve never before thought of myself like that� but never mind that. �_� I particularly loved the use of hot wax, and the bondage, and the chocolate sauce, and� oh, who am I kidding, all of it. Just incredibly, gorgeously, darkly and � even � sinfully hot. Amazing. I wish I could say more about it, but my brain has escaped and I can�t seem to find it anywhere. The next scene was good in that it reminded me of a few things that had, I suppose� slipped my mind to start with. :P I�m often a little hesitant to take it at face value whenever Light acts submissive, but I�m inclined to agree with Mello that just then, it really was out of his hands. And that�s as appealing as it is alarming. I�m simultaneously relieved and disappointed at how quickly he goes back to normal, but really, what would the pairing be without that struggle? I love your portrayal of them through and through, let�s be honest: everything from their snarky quips and the way they play and mess around with each other and the really intense heat and passion between them. It�s all just delicious. :D

Chapter 22: WTF AIBER HOW IS HE ALIVE AHHHHH. Sorry, that just completely threw me for a second. I was not expecting him, of all people, to show up just then � not to mention his behaviour with L. I�m rather flabbergasted, but something about the way Aiber behaves and the infinite coldness of L�s responses tells me that this is going to be fun times for me to read. Which leads me in nicely to Mello and Light � damn, they�re really taking advantage of their newfound privacy, aren�t they? ;) I love how effortlessly they move between moods, and the lazy sensuality of this particular scene was a really nice one. They do seem particularly reluctant to drag themselves away from each other, though, which could easily become a problem� I suppose we�ll see. Damn, though, Aiber sure is infuriating. I like him already, haha. He�s got that outrageous brashness and casual inappropriateness that I seem to find so appealing � in a sadistic sort of way, though, because despite how much I enjoyed that section, the effect it had on L was fairly catastrophic. Exactly how much is there that he�s hiding at the moment�? This chapter is nothing more than one surprise after another � if they�re right about Near, and it seems they are, then that�s an enormous concern and frankly I�m outraged that he�d turn against them like that. Not that he was ever really on their side, but still. That promise that Mello made to Light was greatly intriguing � I thought at first, when he was making Light ask for protection out loud, that it was part of a power game, but I love that it turned out to be something more meaningful. And damn, the mere notion of having Light and Mello set free to deal with Near is so insane, shocking, and unbelievably exciting. Hell yeah. The doctor is an interesting touch � had me speculating a little over his story and his history with the gang � but I kind of forgot about that as soon as Mello revealed his plan. And so soon after their little tender moment, rofl. Those never do last long.

Chapter 23: Lol, the doctor is awesome. XD But I can�t really avoid the idea that Light�s somewhat lost it � again. His essential question of why he doesn�t kill them all seems to be one that he can�t answer himself, which is perhaps what triggered it in the first place. L� with a Cockney accent? Are you sure? I just� I don�t see it. The cockney accent is kind of dying out, to be honest � sad but true. :( I pretty much freaked out when Light revealed his plan to Ryuk, though. That�s going to cause a hell of a lot of problems somewhere down the line, I bet, although it�ll certainly mix things up to have Misa back in the picture, and it makes sense for him to turn to her at this stage. His confrontation with Mello was great, although I�ll admit that I was hoping for them to fight a little more (don�t judge me) but pretty soon it had deteriorated far enough for me to get quite concerned. I�m finding it hard to interpret his behaviour, largely because as everyone knows, it�s irrational and he�s unstable � his panicking followed by his demands for L, and then just sitting in silence over the phone � it�s all rather troubling with regards to his state of mind, but it was done subtly and convincingly, so well done there. And then � holy shit. You never fail to surprise. I think I should make this abundantly clear right here and now: I love Aizawa, and I freaking adore Matsuda, and when they showed up I literally leaped out of my chair and did a little dance on the spot. Your characterisation of them so far seems pretty freaking spot on, too, especially regarding their emotional attachments to the Yagamis. And again, I should admit this right here: I staunchly believe that Light did indeed �leave a mark� on Matsuda� except that I don�t normally phrase it quite like that. �_� I�m not sure whether I�ve talked about this with either of you, but it�s unlikely to matter. Still. I�m just letting you know, in case my biases show through at some point.

My clock is telling me to go to bed, so � until next time. :)
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From agrajagthetesty on January 24, 2010
Chapter 18: I�m starting to get quite confused over L�s behaviour, to be honest � despite what he�s said earlier, he keeps telling Mello to get closer to Light, and I don�t really understand what he actually wants there. I�m guessing that the contradictions are internalised, and that there�s a need to balance the risks with the benefits of Mello and Light becoming closer? Also, I thought that Mello�s line �Just this once, L, let us be the ones to look after you� was a really nice one, both because of what it says about their relationship (*fangirl love*) and what it says about L�s role in the group. He does seem to have placed himself firmly in the role of protector, and that�s partially why it�s so painful for the others to see him in his current condition, so I find Mello�s request to be very touching. I�m also getting more and more concerned about Light. Most of them seem to have this ability to put on a show and appear a lot stronger than they actually are, but at the moment I feel as though the entire situation is very precarious; there�s a risk of it all collapsing from the inside as well as being crushed from outside. Speaking of which, god damn it I was not expecting Near to show up just then. That just made things even more complicated. Mostly it�s a concern because of the way Mello and Light react to him, but it seems like he�s even a threat to L, the one person I would have expected him to be loyal to. The sex scenes in this chapter were really good as well � with L and Light there was a real sense of emotion barely contained, just beneath the surface, whereas with Matt and Mello it was more of an explosion of emotions � very different moods, but both enjoyable and nicely done.

Chapter 19: You know what? I just love it whenever any of the characters talk to each other. You have a real knack for relevant, meaningful dialogue with just the right level of feeling expressed and implied. The opening section was perfect � particularly the way they take turns to reveal things, like a game � it was such a lovely expression of what they�re like when they�re calm, and I thought it was great. That being said, I can understand why Mello and Matt didn�t react so well, although I have to agree with Matt�s comment about Mello�s newfound patience. I too find it extremely impressive. But really, the whole scene was somewhat endearing to me, what with Mello�s somewhat parental combination of resignation and concern for L. It made that fangirl part of me happy all over again, haha. But then, the interaction between Matt and Light (and to some extent, Ryuk) was what made this chapter for me. More than anyone, Matt�s been avoiding addressing the tension so far, and so I liked seeing him in a situation where that wasn�t an option. The way characters react to being baited can tell the reader a lot about them, and given that I�m not a fan of Matt�s, I liked the scene as a way to learn more about him. Also, holy shit. That was a really scary dream L had. Reminds me of some fanart I saw one time, actually... but I�d rather not think about that. D: Seems to have messed L up a bit, given his behaviour when trying to persuade Light to leave the flat � or that may just be L acting in a contradictory manner because that�s what he does. In a way it�s a little sad how much they rely on each other, but it�s also completely endearing. I�m looking forward to seeing how they react to the separation � and, of course, how Mello and Light react to being in the new place alone together. >:)

Chapter 20: Well... I guess I just found out the answer to that last question. XD This chapter was very pleasing to me: I felt it covered a lot of different aspects of their relationship as it stands, and there were a lot of interesting lines � and some really sexy bits of dialogue and narrative, too. Their discussion about Near was interesting; it seems kind of like they�re both itching to get rid of him, and would have done already if not for that pesky pride that�s such an issue for everyone. I can�t really anticipate what effect Near�s presence will have in the long term, save for the fact that it will clearly cause even more tension. Speaking of which, I love how quickly Light turned on the seduction, and the way Mello reacted to it initially � the pride thing again? Or was he just holding back for the sake of it? In any case, I did laugh a little when I realised what Light�s plan had been with the rain. He�s so cunning, even with regards to sex, and that was so like him. It was really quite weird to see them so chummy there � in a way the blowjob was a relief, because that�s far more familiar territory, haha. The little discussion of Misa was very nice: that�s pretty much exactly how I see their relationship � that element of tragedy and Light�s disinterest and Misa being aware of it the whole time � and I�ve been wondering what exactly happened to her, so it�s good to get a bit more information. And then, of course, it was back to the eternal seduction� This time round was especially enjoyable, with all the old heat and passion but an extra delicious edge of darkness that (I freely admit) got me rather excited. I love the dominance and power play between them, it�s unbelievably hot, and that last piece of dialogue (�What do you want me to do to you?� onwards) made me physically shiver. Oh god. I am so freaking excited about the next chapter � I want it right now, but... *shakes fist at time* Soon, though. Soon. 8)
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From agrajagthetesty on January 23, 2010
Chapter 15: Well, first of all, seeing Matt angry was surprisingly fun. As I said before, he�s usually really controlled, so it was really interesting and enjoyable for me to see him like this. I liked the detail that he deliberately became angry since it�s more useful that just being hurt: that actually made me feel quite sorry for him, even though I�d take Mello/Light over Mello/Matt any day of the week. I was a bit surprised when he actually did knock Light out, but to be honest in that situation I really don�t blame him. Also, holy shit, what did L tell the priest?! I can�t even imagine� this is L, he could have said anything� damn, I hope we find out at some point, I�m incredibly curious. But then � well, it somehow seemed less important given what happened afterwards. I don�t know how they found him, especially since the disguise he wore in the caf� meant that even Light didn�t recognise him to start with, but I�m not really dwelling on that since I�m far too busy freaking out. I did enjoy his conversation with Bella � I found it kind of refreshing, because it isn�t often that people are that straightforward with each other in this fic � and I certainly appreciated his level of calm, because if it weren�t for that I�d probably have panicked even more. Mello�s plan though� I can�t decide if it was incredibly clever or incredibly stupid. The whole situation was incredibly tense, and it had me chewing my nails the whole way through � which is pretty much what I�ve come to expect, actually. You don�t disappoint. Except now, of course, I�m completely frantic over L. I�ve got no idea what Light�s thinking either � arghhh, this is so intense, I can�t handle it. D:

Chapter 16: This has probably been the most difficult chapter to review so far, simply because I was rendered kind of incoherent for much of the time. I must say that it�s kind of a relief to see how worried Light is about the situation. It�s always so hard for me to work out what he�s thinking, but I feel that the line �Life or death, love or hate, L was his and no one else's� served to answer a few of my questions. Not that it�s clear-cut now � far from it, as the quote itself is somewhat self-contradictory, but I like to know that the old bond between them is still there. L�s attitude towards Bella is perfect � well, it�s a little suicidal, but it�s got the perfect amount of coldness and indifference and defiance, so it makes me want to applaud him at the same time as call him crazy. L wouldn�t be L if he didn�t have that attitude. Still though, getting him out of there is surely going to be almost impossible. Mello and Matt have next to no leverage at all, whereas Light has to pull off *such* a delicate balancing act� oh lord, I�m squirming in my seat. Why do you do this to me? D: The little bit of silent communication between Light and L was flawlessly done, yet very painful for me to read. There�s something so terribly destructive about their relationship, despite the beauty of it. Also, I know I�m always complaining about the discrepancies in Light�s behaviour and the impossibility of pinning him down, but I suppose that to a certain extent the story and even his own plans rely on that. The sex between him and Bella was brilliantly written � very sensual and very beautiful and with all kinds of interesting overtones from their conversation beforehand. As for the rest of the chapter, well I really wish that I could come up with an insightful observation, but I�m just going ;_; right now. I�m sorry. It�s definitely a sign of how good the writing is that I�m so very flaily and useless at the moment, but that may not provide enough compensation. ._.

Chapter 17: Wow, that was some exciting action at the beginning there. It was a nice change of pace, but I do normally prefer dialogue and character development so I did prefer the scenes that followed. In particular, Mello hugging L in the bathroom made me whimper out loud. You really captured Mello�s dependence and the extent of his feelings and the tenderness and affection, and well � love between them. I believe that you guys already know the extent of my obsession with their dynamic, but still� Wow. That was so amazing. But damn, the whole thing seems to have had quite an effect on Light. His behaviour the next day is really odd and he seems totally unsettled, but as I�m sure you�ve gathered I like to see that other, less in-control side of him. And then there was another really thought-provoking, perfectly constructed bit of dialogue between Light and Mello on the balcony� is this a trend I�ve spotted here? In particular, Mello�s notion that �God created Kira for a reason� was very interesting. I suppose that given his faith it makes sense for him to think that way, but surely the whole situation is kind of incompatible with that way of thinking? As I see it right now, Matt seems to be the least confused and most straight-forward one, and I am starting to appreciate having someone like that around. His comparative rationality is a relief, and I like that he�s almost completely honest about himself. By contrast, L only seems more opaque. Specifically, I�m really curious over what he meant when he told Light to betray him � that whole scene was really sad and poignant, but oh, so many unanswered questions and so much left unsaid. The very last scene with them was gorgeous too � a really lovely section that had me feeling almost tearful � and I don�t get like that easily. Extremely well done. I want to carry on and read more, but I think that it would be wiser to leave it for tomorrow � or rather, today, since it�s 3.30 am. I don�t know how that happened. :(
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From agrajagthetesty on January 21, 2010
Chapter 13: Ahh, I remember this chapter from when I read it the first time... for obvious reasons, I guess. ;D I was surprised by the first mention of Near, as I�d somewhat (blissfully) forgotten that he�s still around, but as soon as my brain kicked in I became rather nervous about that. I�m intrigued as to why L�s keeping the truth about Mello and Matt secret from Near, but even if he wasn�t there are still so many potential issues there. It�s just a guess, but I get the feeling that Near wouldn�t really approve of the relationship between L and Light. :P The fact that they�re almost universally hostile towards Near is kind of pleasing to me for purely personal reasons (�little albino bratling� indeed), and Light�s explanation of the stalemate that exists regarding them writing each other�s names was brilliant. It�s such a clever idea on your parts; it really highlights the endless tension between all the different characters. (Side note: I was going to say �all the different sides� but it strikes me that there really aren�t any sides here. It�s all kind of mixed up and a bit of a free-for-all, isn�t it?) But of course the main issue here is WHAT THE HELL HAPPENED WITH LIGHT? Does he have a notebook now?! Judging by his behaviour and what I know of him, he almost certainly has, but I hate not knowing for sure. And undoubtedly, if he doesn�t have one � well, that would be extremely telling. His conversation with Mello on the balcony, though, was so brilliant that words have utterly failed me. I cannot explain how wonderful it was for me � how everything they said and thought fit so perfectly with the characters and their actions and who they are as people. It made a big impression on me the first time, and now I�m remembering all the reasons why. Just incredible. I�m speechless.

Chapter 14: Oh damn, that kiss... it was amazing... and yet I don�t know whether to cheer or to go �NOOOOO.� Such is the nature of this fic, I suppose. I loved the total unthinking madness of it, for one, and L�s reaction was great in that it felt exactly right for the situation, but at the same time... waaaah. ;_; I found Matt�s reaction really appropriate, too: up until now he�s been almost superhuman in his restraint, so it was nice to see him lose it a bit. And then... oh man, I don�t know how to review the sex. :| I keep trying to think of an intelligent and meaningful observation, or hell, even just a coherent one, but it�s next to impossible because the only words in my head right now are �HOLY JESUS GOD THAT WAS SO HOT I ALMOST DIED�. Epic fail on my part, but hey � maybe that�s the reaction you were aiming for? I did like the idea that it was Mello�s guilt making him so aggressive, and that one line about Light �playing submissive to maintain superior� was pretty fantastic, but mostly my mind was just like �UNF� the whole time. I�m sorry. ._. It makes me feel like a bad person, especially since the terrible effect that the whole thing has had on L and Matt is so very apparent. The last scene in the church was so tragically perfect � and at the same time it gave me very, very happy feelings because oh, how I do love me some good old theological imagery. Also. When Light went �Itai�? I practically flipped out myself.

Gah, I had hoped to read way more than this today, but the passage of time has foiled me yet again. I�ll be back shortly though, so in the meantime keep being awesome and stuff. :D
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From agrajagthetesty on January 18, 2010
Chapter 11: Again, I'm finding drugged-up-and-out-of-it!Light strangely appealing... no, I don't know, either. Something in the way he's weirdly helpless, yet still all defiant and cursing like a sailor, haha. His interactions with Mello ("Get the fuck moving!" "Don't fucking curse at me!") made me snort a little bit. Oh, that marvellous antagonism. In a way I'm kind of glad that it doesn't die down even when they're as frantic as they were in this chapter - it's so much more fun, and just like them. The scene in the car where Light asked for a name though... wow. What a situation. The way you phrased it, that line about everything becoming a shade of grey and the following few paragraphs, were just perfect. I thought they added quite a lot of insight into Mello's character as well as Light's, and considering how short the section was, it brought up a lot of issues that the series itself only touched upon. Light�s behaviour in the caf� was intriguing indeed... not so much his enjoyment at the reaction he got, that wasn�t very surprising, but more his sudden contemplation and equally sudden rejection of the idea of betraying the others. Just what is going on there? I can only assume that even he doesn�t know. Their laughter in the car was a great release of tension - really weird of course, but I can actually sympathise somewhat. And hot damn did I love that last scene... Light/Mello bonding, yaaaaay~ I can�t help but find that scene somewhat sweet in its calm and the way they�re both so obviously confused... so weirdly touching. Matt�s presence was something of a storm cloud, though. I can�t help but think that something�s going to snap, and snap soon.

Chapter 12: *faints* Holy shit, I love this chapter so much it�s kind of unreal. So many things going on here. I really liked the first few scenes, with the dialogue between Matt and Mello and then the one between L and Light. I felt as if it let out a bit of the tension, but at the same time so much was left unsaid and there was a whole lot left hanging in the air. And the fact that L and Light held their conversation while in such an intimate situation � mmmf, love it. That bit with them in the bath was really nice too. You do seem to like that kind of bizarrely cute situation. Intensely awkward for Mello, though. XD And then the second half of the chapter � a whole lot of shit suddenly went down all at once, and it kind of blew me away. Light�s anger was pretty intense there; at first I was kind of surprised by how badly he reacted, but after thinking about it some more I think that L was being pretty horrible to him just then. But then, L is a bastard � we all know that, and it�s not reasonable to expect him to stop doing this kind of thing just because other stuff is going on. Things only got better after Mello got involved, too. I really enjoy the dynamic between the three of them, the way they constantly shift alliances and how those alliances are liable to collapse at any moment. L�s long speech was just fantastic. I�m glad he said it, and I feel that things may become smoother with it out in the open, but to be honest I don�t see that it�ll do all that much good. And then Ryuk... oh Lord, that was brilliant and terrible at the same time. It�s a monstrous cliffhanger � but here I am, about to pass out because it�s late and I didn�t get much sleep last night either... ffffff, this is killing me. D: I have no choice but to stop reading and go to sleep � but. Expect me back. Very soon. >:)
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From agrajagthetesty on January 13, 2010
Chapter 6: Damn, that was a hell of a ride. The shower scene was just gorgeous: all that switching between tension and controlled aggression and sensuality... and despite all the changes in mood it flowed really well. Yay, some proper Mello/Light at last! Definitely worth the wait; it was damn hot. The sudden switch in Light's mood surprised me completely. I never would have anticipated that and yet I'm glad it happened. Shows Light's actually human - and also it seems that I just like to see the characters surprised, because I found Mello's reaction to it very interesting. Poor L, though. It was difficult for me to work out exactly what he's thinking, but he seems to be so tortured and confused. The little section where he's thinking about how it would be possible for him to convince himself that he never cared was just heartbreaking. I'm rather curious about where Light's gone off to now; reading this again has sparked quite a few memories of events I read before, but it seems I have a gap in my memory right around this point. And you should consider it a great sign of success that I actually rather enjoyed the last scene between Matt and Mello. It takes a skillful writer, with a good amount of emotional depth in their writing, to make me even somewhat convinced by those two, but I could really see a connection between them then. Nice job.

Chapter 7: Hmm, wasn't expecting the bit of Light/Mikami in there, but I thought it worked all the same. It's far from my OTP, but there's still something about that pairing... I think it's the potential for all the interesting power play that does it. But oh, god, the bit where Light cut the tracker out of his arm made me shudder so much. I'm a bit squeamish about that sort of thing, but it would probably have had that effect on me anyway to be honest. You did a really good job of it; it kind of got under my skin (no pun intended), and the way you described the pain was really effective. It seems to me that Light would have rather enjoyed the conversation with Melchiorre - after all, it isn't often that he can get away with letting his total Kira persona out into the open. And that whole double-fake-name business was a really good idea. Misora Tsuki, though. Honestly, what a choice. It should come as no surprise that I am very happy to see Ryuk. :D But god, the further I read the more sorry I feel for L. His situation is really not good, and I can't think of any way for it to be satisfactorily resolved. :( And a brutal cliffhanger. You beasts! ;P

Chapter 8: Oh *damn*, they're really going through the wars, aren't they? And so inconvenient, too - not that being in a car crash is ever convenient, but they must have attracted a lot of attention en route to the hotel. Once more, all the detailed accounts of injuries and pain made me get all squeamish again. :( At least that means that it was described well and appropriately visceral. I liked the way they all seemed a bit more cooperative in this chapter. It gives me hope that they may actually be able to work together without cutting each other to pieces, at least when the situation calls for cooperation. Oh, and this: "Your tracking chip is most likely damaged, if I let you go out into the field with it, the readings it sends back are going to conflict with the readings of the other tracking chip in the kill switch" made me go "Ohhhhhh *snap*." XD

Chapter 9: Awww, Pocky, how unexpectedly adorable. L�s trick with the tea made me give a little evil giggle. To other people that may sound a bit strange, but I�m hoping you interpret it as the compliment it�s supposed to be. I have to admit, seeing Light all confused and on painkillers is rather weird for me; I almost find him... endearing. Hell, it�s probably the nicest he�s been so far, haha. This line: "If it is your intention to kill me, Kira, if I find myself dying in your arms again� don't let me know it was you� was just perfectly heartbreaking. ;__; I have to say, though, the whole plan of L acting as proxy seems... well, risky, let�s put it that way. This chapter has made me feel as if all of the members of the group are vital in order for them to function smoothly... and yet at the same time, with all of them around they simply *cannot* function smoothly. Wow, what a paradox.

Chapter 10: I found the opening scene of this one, where L is pondering the Second Kira and his own position, particularly interesting. It kind of sums up my impressions of his situation right now � all those mixed up emotions. Very nice. Bella seems like quite a character� definitely reminiscent of a certain someone we all know so well. ;) I like the way L is just an ass to her from start to finish. I suppose that him trying to actually be polite and nice wouldn�t have gone that well anyway, but still I enjoyed his attitude. Bella�s trick with the diners was very sneaky � I seem to remember a scene a bit like that in one of the Artemis Fowl books, actually... In general, I found the conversation between her and L to be rather enjoyable in its antagonism. Her mixture of cunning and charm makes her a particularly good foil for someone like L (again, a somewhat familiar dynamic). Light�s entrance was dramatic indeed; he did really well given the circumstances. In fact, I think that everyone did an admirable job in their respective roles this chapter. Very pleasing. :)
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From agrajagthetesty on January 12, 2010
Chapter 3: That scene... *That* scene - and I probably don't have to specify which scene *that* one is, but just in case, I'm talking about the scene where Mello walks in on L and Light - that scene was perfection. I couldn't even sit still through it, I was just squirming all over the place with utter twisted joy. So, so wrong, and yet so amazing. L is a crazy, inappropriate, sadistic, marvellous, genius bastard, and he deserves to be locked up and then given some kind of medal. I'm actually somewhat incoherent, lol. I kind of don't know what to make of his behaviour because it was just so wrong and it startled me to death, and yet at the same time I could totally see him doing it. Nnnnf, it was just great. I have to say that I'm feeling strangely proud of Mello right now; I actually think he's dealing with things remarkably well, considering how fucked up it all is (already) and how damn delicious those brownies sounded (seriously, I think I drooled a little bit). And what an intriguing way to end the chapter. Even Light doesn't know where his loyalties truly lie. Things are getting very interesting.

Chapter 4: L, in a suit, wearing his hair in a ponytail? Do you guys know about all my secret fantasies or what? There were other reasons for me loving that, too, mostly to do with how perfectly he fooled Light. I got a bit of a kick out of that, to be quite honest. Always satisfying to see that smugness falter - at least, for me it is. >:) I have to say though, this chapter makes Light come across as such a horny bastard. That's nothing new really, but it has to be said all the same, since it's the most intense it's been so far. The little incident in the men's room certainly got my attention - and then the trick with the apple - perfect. I'd have missed Ryuk otherwise. I hope he isn't just an unseen presence for the whole fic. Oh, and that last exchange in the cafe ("So you're calling me cruel." "You have your moments." "That hurts." "No it doesn't.") was brilliant and again made me squirm with glee, as did the final conversation between L and Light. This chapter has had a lot of great moments for my OTP. What an ending, too. Poor Matt, but it was bound to happen. XD

Chapter 5: Uh, well first of all that was some fantastically hot sex. Wowee. Seems that earlier experiences have made Mello a pro at dealing with witnessing that sort of thing - again, I'm very impressed by how he seems to be taking it all in his stride so far, although there could easily be a storm on the horizon. The mention of L's reaction to talking about Watari made me wibble a bit. I love Watari; I consider him to have been a strong (not to mention totally ass-kicking) patriarchal figure in L's life, and that loss must have been devastating. ;_; That emotional feel went out the window pretty fast once the discussion about possible hiding places for the note began, though. I never get tired of how blunt L is about these things. I find it hilarious, and it's just so him. "I've never seen someone do so much bad shit for a good cause" is an excellent line; it really sums up a lot about Mello, for me at least. And wow, another stinger of an ending. This is becoming a clear pattern. It's actually a bit of a cliffhanger you've got there, but I've been reading for quite a while now so I'm going to wrap this up here. Expect another review soon though, because I'm not going to let this one lie for long.
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From agrajagthetesty on January 10, 2010
Hey guys, agrajag here, actually providing proof of my constant claims that I would read this! :O I in fact read a chunk on MangaBullet last summer, all the while planning to write a review of epic proportions once I'd finished. Unfortunately, after getting up to chapter 18 or so, I had to stop reading in order to prepare for university applications; since then (of course) I've forgotten a whole lot of what happened. :( So my new plan is this: to read again, and to leave relatively short reviews every few chapters or so, rather than one monster of a review on the whole thing (which was, in retrospect, kind of a mad idea).

It appears that reviews on this site aren't chapter-specific, so I ought to say that I've only read the prologue and chapter 1 right now. ^^; But I have to say, current impressions are very favourable. The dialogue and interaction between the characters practically sizzles. There's a truckload of tension and at times this marvellous spitefulness surfaces; it's got me by turns wincing and grinning like a maniac. I've even reacted physically a few times, like waving my hands around and going "oh snap" out loud and stuff. XD The grammar is sometimes a little hard for me to follow, but that might just be because it's a little more stream of consciousness-esque than I'm used to. You also have a tendency to spend a lot of time over characters' thoughts and their reactions to each other. While I appreciate the level of detail and the various layers it adds to the writing, it meant that I lost track of the narrative thread a few times, and had to scroll back to remind myself what was going on. But again, that might just be a failure on my part. ^^;

Overall though, I really enjoyed it. As an opening, it packs a hell of a punch, and I really can't wait to get my teeth into the plot again. I hope it won't bother you if I carry on leaving reviews every few chapters - if the effect it would have on your inbox would cause a problem, just let me know. :)
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From ANON - Anon on December 15, 2009
I really like the fact that you've picked Death Note's end and changed it at your will to continue the story, yet in such a believable way! honestly, that is a lot more difficult and praiseble in my eyes than writing something paralel to the canon (AU is also pretty hard to me as well...). anyways, L and Light's moment was intense, and that's saying little. very very sad.
I really have to read this, I shall try :P
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From tgbrunner02 on November 17, 2009
I HAVE to go ahead and leave a review. This is great - the characterization is flawless, the scenario is perfectly plausible, and the mood is fitting.

And I loled so hard at L's cake comment.
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From redheadedslut5 on November 05, 2009
Now that I'm all finished and pulling my goo-self out of the puddle on the floor, this has been one hell of a ride, guys. I know I dropped a comment on Maru-chan's dA, but I thought that I'd be a good audience member and leave a strong review here as well.

Such a delicious read. THIS is what fanfic should truly be, IMO. Don't get me wrong, I like PWP, but I can only take so much of it, and this has been truly refreshing. The time and care you two give to detail is simply amazing, and just when I had thought that I had found the most perfect one-liner, I'm slapped in the face with another one. This has been rich and complicated and... Yeah, I'm finding it difficult to find more words to describe this. Very much looking forward to R/R 2B and hoping that it's everything and more that this piece was. Brava, once more!
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From CriminalMartyr on August 17, 2009
It's 2:47 AM, and I've just read to the end of this, after doing so over the course of more than a month. Yes, I'm going to re-read and review chapters, but this I write now because there's been a need instilled to express just what you've done for me while it is still raw.

There is no amount of praise, no insightful comment, no dialysis of my interpretation of your work that can cover this. This was stunning, but that's not the point. This had a physiological effect on me � that I would read a line and my eyes would close of their own accord, and every fiber of my conscious being would scream a resounding 'no'. It's sad when you make a comment like that, and you're not exaggerating.

Perhaps it's because I like detail, and I like the dissection of emotions and intentions. Perhaps it's because I had, and during this gained, some perception of your portrayal of the characters, from pictures, from bombarding you with questions. Perhaps it's because it mirrors what I see them as, potentially, so closely that the hammer was re-shaped because it hit the nail on the head so many times. I don't know � and therein lies the rub.

You turned and twisted the world inside out; made vindication and vindictiveness seem the same, and made love more something of cruelty than of devotion -and yet kept the pure undertones. Violence was the right thing and I almost, almost didn't know who I wanted to win at the end because it really was the end of all things.

Good God � for all it's worth.
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From BlueOctoberSky on July 08, 2009
I had the day off and nothing to do. So, I decided to reread Redeemer while waiting for the next update for 2B. As I made my way through the story,I couldn't help but once again be amazed at how well it all fits together. And how well it fits with and leads into 2B. L will always be my favorite, but you have given life to characters that wasn't there in the original series. You've increased the depth of character needed for attachment. It is incredible to think that while creating a natural and complex extension to the cannon plot line, you were able to also create realistic character development. I would love to read any original fiction you have written because this is splendid and beyond most fiction that is being sold in a store.
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From animekid on May 03, 2009
this chapter had a lot of mind fuckery and just oh so good kira goodness....

hah this is actually for both parts; I feel for Matt and Mello though.

If this is a mello/light story then I will laugh my ass off....I thought I seen something in the op statement about something of those two...but I rather be ignorant and just keep on reading the story...

still a good read, people in character, has the usual mello/matt goodness which I love...among other things :P
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From animekid on May 03, 2009
holy shit I cannot read this all in one day; I can't even download this on my ds to read.....

*sighs* guess I have to read this massive story in parts until my oh so part that I need for my R4 is working again....why doesn't this have more reviews no matter how massive it is?

Why? Because people are assholes for pwp and smexing and not plot with smexing....

*coughs*

still I am going to read and try to review as much as I can because I didn't know this existed...and I rarely go into the yaoi part of death note and instead roam general because.....of strange reasons....

hahaha matt reminds me of me....to a T >
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