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Reviews for Tug-of-War

By : thewriterwhocameinfromthecold
  • From ANON - joeparas on August 05, 2015
    I cry! Motoko is definitely the less interesting subplot in this story, and waiting so long for an update only to get a chapter of her - especially after how the last ended with the tease of some orgy-ish action between Keitaro, Naru, Kitsune and Haitani. It didn't help that it kinda felt icky with Motoko losing control of her body and losing her virginity with it - which is so much more than one's maidenhead...

    I hope another update doesn't take as long, and we get back to the more fun stuff. I enjoy your writing!
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  • From ANON - Jason on July 31, 2015
    I gotta say, Kitsune has a funny way of showing she adores Keitaro. Naru as well. There's a big difference between the relationship Naru/Kitsune/Keitaro have and what Kitsune did with Haitani. And from what I've read so far, the only one who seems to have any feelings for Keitaro is Naru, and she seems to have an easier time telling Kentaro than telling Keitaro. From what you've written of Kitsune, Keitaro is nothing but stress relief for her. If I were Keitaro I'd be upset too. It's like the girls did a bait and switch on him. They both screw him first, get him used to a relationship, then spring it on him that it's not a monogamous relationship after he's already developed serious feelings for him. Even after the promise girl revelation, Naru's self-loathing about her lack of devotion compared to Keitaro sure didn't last long. Kitsune and Naru already have him trapped. They get Keitaro to have feelings for them, then spring on him that they're still gonna screw other guys, but throw him the bone that he can screen them first and he can screw other girls, knowing full well he wouldn't want to due to the feelings they got him to have.

    This fic really just casts Naru and Kitsune in a really bad light to me.
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  • From ANON - hugplx on July 27, 2015
    The time between updates hurts my heart.
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  • From Killerman83ca on May 15, 2015
    I can't wait to see what will happen in chapter 29. So please update soon so I read it and tell you what I think of it. Also Motoko's friend kissing her was a surprise to me. So please update soon.
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  • From ANON - joeparas on April 29, 2015
    Muuuuuuch better. A little disappointed the rewrite didn't include Naru actually being a little more naughty (with someone else obv) than frenching another dude, but I'm sure that'll come. Glad to see this story isn't going down that dark path too!
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  • From ANON - joeparas on April 28, 2015
    Been thinking more on this chapter and it just makes less and less sense. Why would Naru bring her friends to a party with a supposed rapist and his friends? Or leave her ignorant friend alone at said party where she's shown to KNOW that people will be spiking drinks - foresight Mutsumi is woefully without. This chapter just seems kinda left field given the tone of the rest of the story, like you had a sudden mood change on your break and did a complete 180 on your original plan for it.

    Or maybe I'm just thinking too much.

    Probably has something to do with the criminally low number of stories with promiscuous protagonists without dark themes. There's like... none. At least none where those main characters are women that doesn't devolve into the aforementioned dark themes, or just NTR territory.
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  • From ANON - joeparas on April 28, 2015
    Gah, waited ages for this. Really disappointing how dark it went. Was hoping for a cheery smutty fic with these characters to be honest. Oh well.
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  • From Killerman83ca on January 14, 2015
    Can you please update soon. I can't wait to see what happen's in Chapter 27 the Party part 2. I hope that Tsuruko help's Motoko though the pain she is having by telling Keitaro about it and him helping Motoko out.
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  • From ANON - Terego on December 15, 2014
    Long time no see! And what a neat little twist on the original story.
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  • From ANON - Troublesome6791 on December 14, 2014
    Thanks for the update. Yet another chapter of smutty goodness mixed with the possibility for even more drama. Looks like Keitaro might experience some more heartache with Naru. I hope I'm wrong, but Naru and Kitsune's history sort of speaks for itself. Looking forward to your next update. Also, don't worry too much about how long it takes to update. I've recently posted my first LH story on ff.net, but with working 14-15 hours a day, it's become almost impossible to update. The end of the year is hard for a lot of people, because in many businesses it is when things pick up the most. Just do what you can, when you can. Thanks for taking the time to update both stories.
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  • From ANON - Troublesome6791 on September 20, 2014
    Once again, another great chapter. I realized something about chapters. They aren't for the readers convenience. They are actually there to frustrate readers of stories, while in actuality they exist for the benefit of the author. Chapters leave readers in suspense, waiting to see what comes next, guaranteeing that the author's story will be read. This goes doubly so for fanfiction authors and manga artists, who update their stories one chapter at a time. I enjoy this story, but the cliffhangers are killing me. But of course I shall keep reading, because I've put too much time into reading this story, which really says something about the quality of your skills as an author.
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  • From ANON - Terego on September 19, 2014
    Aaaah, so that's what it was. Makes sense for the kind of fic this is :) And a pretty grand one it continues to be, too!
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  • From ANON - Troublesome6791 on September 07, 2014
    I've been reading this since it was first posted, and I have a couple of things to say. First off I apologize for not reviewing until just now. I've been enjoying this story for both the story and the smut, yet not once have I reviewed to even say good job. Second, the actual review. This is definitely one of my favorite Love Hina fics, both from aff and ff.net. While it may take you a while to update sometimes, the quality of most of your chapters is definitely in the upper tiers as far as fanfiction authors goes. I like how the last chapter ended, mostly because it opens up a whole new realm of possibilities, such as making a primary pairing more likely. It also opens up the door for a lot of drama, especially if Keitaro figures out that a girl he's sleeping with had sex with one of his best friends, assuming that's what's gonna happen. I can't wait for your next update to any of your stories, and I'll try and leave a review for May/December, because I also greatly enjoy that story as well.
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  • From ANON - Scuenceaguy on July 20, 2014
    holy shitballz this is fantastic
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  • From ANON - hugplx on July 08, 2014
    This story, and your writing, continue to be incredibly hot, good job. Naru and Kitsune are different enough to provide flavour and worth to the sex scenes, especially now that they feature all three of them.

    That being said, I am a little disappointed with how this story turned out. I had the impression at the beginning of this story that the girls were independant and sexually liberated, however, at the first sign of a stable man in their lives, they tied themselves to him almost immediately - the fantastically unique quality of having a penis and not being a douchebag being his finest qualities.

    Your stories tend to be a little more than smutfests or pwp, otherwise I wouldn't have brought this up. It just seems kind of cheap. The girls are seemingly rather experienced. While having a man handy around the dorm would be novel at first, I can't see why they wouldn't go back to their promiscuous ways soon after - not maliciously, but habitually.

    I dunno, them throwing themselves at him and seemingly abstaining from sex from others just seemed lazy.
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