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By : Arianawray

From revaeley on September 15, 2011
Hello, Zoni, are you mentally challenged? If you have such a problem with the author's typos, why don't you offer to be their beta instead of nitpicking? Learn how the fuck real English is spelled, then get back to me. You would think if you were going to bitch about a certain typo, you would Google it first or maybe even use a real dictionary to see if the spelling is an alternative to your "correct" spelling.

You also don't seem to know what "in character" and "out of character" means. These terms refer to the characterization of a specific character in THEIR OWN CANON, as in the characterization of them in the show or book they are from. Ciel's behavior in the latest chapters is most definitely OUT OF CHARACTER in terms of how he behaves in the managa and in the anime. He is not a happy, playful little boy. He is damaged and has a warped mind, and finds joy in next to nothing.

Is the way Kitty has developed his character wrong? No, it's a possibly legitimate way for Ciel to change over time. Does that make it in character? No. He is out of character compared to his development in Kuroshitsuji's canon.

You would think that you would recognize Ciel's behavior in the beginning of the story is more in character than anything else in the story, but I guess you're too much of a sap lover to care about the canon, since you go right on ahead and say that it would be out of character for Sebastian to leave. Except oops, that's pretty much *exactly* in character for Sebastian. He's already done it to Ciel before in canon, and Kitty's rationale behind him doing it again is sound and in character, at least.

Needless to say, I think your review was idiotic and patronizing, and I was also bored enough to complain about it. To take a page out of your book, "Common sense is your friend. :)" Oh wait, you have none.

Kitty, your story is one of the more interesting ones I've read in the Kuroshitsuji fandom. Keep up the good work. And don't edit out your Brit spellings, they're fine the way they are.
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From zoni on September 10, 2011
I have to say, I've been impressed with the last few chapters. They've seemed more in character and the story is definitely getting interesting. I always admire your writing, but I can't help but feel that you've been slipping recently. There have been a number of typos in the past three chapters. You've also managed to misspell the same word several times. That word is defense, which you invariably spell as defence. Spell check is your friend. :)

I do hope you're not planning on having Sebastian leave. Not only would it be severely out of character, but it'd kill this nice dynamic they're starting to have. I'm really enjoying the story right now. Keep up the good work!
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From r0xbuddi on September 07, 2011
I didn't abandon you or this story!! I swear I didn't! I went to Japan for two weeks, moved apartments, and sat through a paltry hurricane. I'm glad though, that you've been writing in the mean time!!

I'm pleased about the progression of the story. The development with Grell actually being the redhead was a great touch, and I had to laugh at Seb's treatment of his ah, "used" hand. I'm terrible with my sweetums on that account too. You do wonderful explanations about exactly why there's a chainsaw in Victorian England.

I'm enjoying it. I think that's all that really needs to be said.
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From MeyhamM2 on September 05, 2011
This chapter was nice. And by nice, I mean SWEET... I absolutely love passive Sebastian.

Anyway, I apologize for not reviewing sooner; I've just started at a new university and am still getting in the swing of things. Was totally pissed though when my Kindle's WiFi didn't work on campus and I couldn't read this chapter as soon as it came out on Wednesday!

I was really glad to see Grell show up; you wrote him wonderfully, too. Still can't wait to see what becomes of the Cleveland Street issue, though. However, you are making me nevous with this "plan" that Sebastian has involving Ciel! I'd really hate to see this revealed to be all a rouse or something after coming so far!

Viva la uke!Sebastian, Meyham
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From MeyhamM2 on August 20, 2011
Loved this chapter. A couple of other Kuroshitsuji authors have written stories around the Cleveland Street Scandal, so I'm interested to see where you go with it. If your writing up until now is any indication --which I'm certain it is-- it's going to be AWESOME. Gee, I hope to don't run out of period topics for your story arcs!

-Meyham
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From Sparrowhawk on August 19, 2011
I loved this chapter! The intimacy developing between Sebastian and Ciel has me both excited and apprehensive. Will someone find out? What will happen if it gets out? Will Lizzy eventually learn about it? Is Ciel still going to marry her? What is the prince going to do now that what Ciel predicted has come to pass? There are so many things I want to know!! I'm also really glad that Ciel has become happier. I did always like his sarcastic, kind of bitter, dark personality, but it also always made me kind of sad to see it in such a small child. Devil though he may be, Sebastian is definitely a good influence on him. Can't wait for the next update!!
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From sillyneko345 on August 17, 2011
I just wanted to let you know that I am not even particularly fond of this anime, and yet I enjoy this story of yours very much. Your writing is superb, and I read each new chapter. Excellent job!
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From Sparrowhawk on August 11, 2011
I did read the last chapter, but didn't yet have a chance to review, so here we go! The history of the Phantomhives was very interesting, especially when you mentioned the balance having killed Ciel's father. So Ambrose wants Ciel to become the balance? He could do it, no doubt, with Sebastian's help. I didn't expect that with the spell gone wrong and all that jazz. I love the interaction between Ciel and Sebastian in both the last chapter and the latest, especially when Ciel finally reveals to Ambrose that he's no longer bound to Sebastian by a contract for his soul. Beautiful! The part when they're in bed and Ciel is practically molesting Sebastian is hilarious! Sebastian certainly had a busy day! It'd drive me crazy, but for him it's merely "trying" lol. Who is Ambrose talking about when he's deliriously rambling about "her"? Hmm ... have to think on that. And so, Ambrose dies. What's going to happen next I wonder? They don't seem to have much in the way of peaceful days, do they? Then again, if they did the story wouldn't be quite so interesting. Love it, as always, and I'm looking forward to reading the next installment!!
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From ANON - Anon on August 08, 2011
Review for the last two chapters, "Mentor" and "History": I loved Sebastian's musings on the nature of his attachment to Ciel, and Ciel's attachment to Sebastian, and what all that may or may not portend for their future. It actually answered the questions from my former review very well, although I do wonder if Sebastian isn't selling himself short in Ciel's affections. Ciel may be young, but he is mistrustful of the world at large, and has virtually no one besides Sebastian who could function as a confidante. I doubt Ciel would toss him away so easily, but I suppose time will tell! And the nonchalant admittance of both characters that they do not love each other--are not capable of love- is more than a little ironic. Both of them, in canon and your story, seem to regard themselves as more evil and emotionless than they really are, which is a fascinating dynamic to read!

I have actually noticed this for a while, but you seem to have been writing this story in present rather than past tense. I like it; it gives an interesting cadence to the story, but I wonder if there was another reason for choosing it? Either way, your writing is truly beautiful and your word choice is perfection!

Even with the change in their dynamic, you still keep their relationship so true to who these two characters are. Ciel, despite his innocence and uncertainty, is probably the only person who could truly be Sebastian's equal. He never really lets the butler get away with taking too many liberties, and even when he is afraid, he is able to deal with the demon forthrightly. That is part of the thing that makes this pairing so fascinating, I think. On the other hand, Sebastian seems also to have become more assertive, freed from the contract and moving into the role of "tutor." Watching the evolution of their relationship is such fun, and although it seems unlikely that these two could ever actually move together and create a deeper, more positive bond, you've crafted this development quite believably.

The detail about Ciel's heritage is fascinating, and woven so well with actual history. I still am curious what exactly Ambrose was referring to when he talked about "powers of balance": is there a real force pulling strings to keep evil and good in check? Or is it more of a karma-like idea that he is clinging on to that has not practical application? Questions, questions!

I Lol'ed at the part where Sebastian's scoffs at the idea that Ambrose read Carsten the Bible. It really is too comical an idea. Also cracked up over the exchange about throwing Ambrose out the window.

I like that through Carsten and Sebastian's interactions, we are learning a lot about what demon society entails when not among humans; it isn't necessarily relevant to the story, but interesting nonetheless.

Can't wait for more, as always :)

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From on August 07, 2011
Publish a book already. You are so talented, you've got me hooked on your fanfiction as though it were heroine!! I work almost 24/7 so I rarely have time to read....yet when I stumbled upon this lovely piece of literature, Iwas awestruck!!! You are a remarkable writer, phenominal!!!If I could afford a tutor, Id beg and plead for you to be mine! I look forward to reading more of your chapters, whenever you post them.Thank you so sincerely for sharing your beautiful piece of work with us!
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From MeyhamM2 on August 03, 2011
After this chapter I've finally managed to put a complement into words for you; it's something I've thought all along, but wasn't sure how to phrase. Devilish Impulses, and other stories this well written, have distinct advantages over not-so-well written romantic stories for one very important and hard-to-achieve reason: The plot is not merely a vehicle for more smut, it does not exist only to produce more chances for a sex scene. Partially as a result of that, we get the second benefit: you have managed to keep us all guessing. After reading chapter one, I never thought that Ciel would end up interacting so much with and original character much less have lost his contract with Sebastian.
And I hope you realize that by achieving this, you have done something that many writers of canon series *cough*MasashiKishimoto*cough* have not done; to maybe put this is better perspective for you --seeing as you are an Inuyasha fan-- the moment Inuyasha promised Kagome that they'd find all the Shikon jewel shards, you knew that when the story ended, they'd have found all the shards. You just knew. And that can really make things less exciting. So basically, I guess I'm saying that your little story here has maintained my (and many other people's) interest better manga goddess Rumiko Takahashi managed to. Huzzah!
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From r0xbuddi on August 03, 2011
See this? This is me fist pumping mentally about the progress of the story. Go Carsten! Whooo! You, KGL, are spinning an wonderful tale that may just come to a great head!May? Will. I love the expansion of the Kuroshitsuji world, building on what little the viewers had originally seen. Wonderful!
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From r0xbuddi on August 01, 2011
Alright, I lied, you're too good to think about leaving. You've yet to turn me off of anything, and I'm sitting here at the dinner table drinking the DI soup. I was wondering how the past trauma would play out, and while I think the sexual abuse was addressed well, I'm a bit skeptical on the oak desk/sacrificial altar being an employable technique.

I would hate to see this end any time soon. More villians, more villians!

Carsten, why you no love da boi and hiz butler?
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From Sparrowhawk on July 22, 2011
This chapter was handled perfectly. I like how much Sebastian has been thinking of Ciel's feelings in regards to more "adult" things, and that he doesn't make fun of him or laugh at him for his "accident" after his dream. I love that their banter is still there and the fact that you've included thoughts Ciel has about where their "game" is going and if the game is even still being played. The exchange in the bath was ... delicate and extremely arousing. Ciel is very bold and shy in just the right parts, as I believe he would be for his character, so that was very well done. Congrats on another beautifully done chapter! Looking forward to reading the next update!! (:
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From MeyhamM2 on July 22, 2011
Another stunning chapter! Just to let you know, I do read each chapter every Wednesday when it comes out, but I don't often have the time or mental capacity afterwards to leave a good review until later.
And hey, I'm still here, so you haven't squicked me yet.
Also, I finally got a link and review for Devilish Impulses up on my rec list, the-cabinet.livejournal.com. I hope it conveys the love I have for this story and the respect I hold for you as an author. Oh, and that it brings you more good reviews. Keep up the excellent work!
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