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From Sparrowhawk on June 20, 2011
I meant to review earlier, but I was interrupted. So, here we go. First of all, great new chapter! Always love it when I'm able to read more of your story. Sebastian has it rough, doesn't he? Wonder how things are going to develope now. Although, I can understand Ciel's feelings concerning Sebastian's little expedition with what happened to him and his limited understanding of courtship and his butler's subtle hints. What is that Percival Ambrose guy planning with Sophia Easton?? So want to know! Can't wait for your next update!!! Thanks (:
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From MeyhamM2 on June 16, 2011
Alexandre, you now have competition.

I love you. I love this story. I love how you don't make any of the characters behave a certain way, but let them develop and act naturally. Also, contrary to what other reviews have suggested, this chapter proves what I (and I suspect you, too) knew: that Sebastian is not, suddenly, a pedophile. You wrote, yourself, that he is neither attracted to nor turned off by humans, in general. He has undirected, animal-like carnal urges. He is just as surprised and confused, himself, as to why he is suddenly feeling these things with an obvious direction at Ciel.
I also love how Ciel is unsure as to how to act in his situation. I think it is to be expected that he would emotionally regress somewhat in an unfamiliar situation that he knows he does not have the upper hand in. It is clear to me that Ciel does not realize that he has grown emotionally attatched to Sebastian, and misinterprets some of his jealousy as disgust (although I am certain he -was- disgusted by what Sebastian did, just perhaps, not completely so). It is obvious that he's jealous -even if it's unconscious- by the way he acted with Bard. I am very interested to see how far he takes this new game.
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From r0xbuddi on June 16, 2011
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How are you ever going to top this?! 17 was well worth the wait! This is brilliant and skilled story telling! Ok, I'll stop with the !. They were on sale.

I like that we're seeing some progression with Percival. Great-grandfather ... Will he hold some sway over Ciel's decision through that association? What is the final plan? Who knows... I'm fascinated, in a morbid way, Sebastian's solution to his pressing need. I'll be honest, I was not expecting that. Sebastian really doesn't get that Ciel just isn't ready at his age. Where is that infinite patience, devil, you've got how many years of life, yet you can't wait for the kid to mature and then come a-suitoring? Not saying he'd be any more open to it then, but hey, at least he wouldn't be hot on the trail of emotional and physical trauma, as well as sexual disinterest. Think man, think!

Though I supposed he gets caught returning the jacket and cap to the laundry facilities, I guess anything can happen. Why was Ciel near the laundry room to begin with? Baldroy's reaction makes me wonder if Ciel's presence in any of the less formal room is common at all.

I like the sound of smoldering Baldroy. Cotton pants, a vest and little else. Nom yom. Take that boy, take that boy all the way up to his bedroom! I like B as an underappreciated character... I enjoy how he's wise enough to understand he is indeed, the center of a power play. Just how involved he'll get, how far Ciel will push him into the fray, I don't know. Fingers cross Sebastian doesn't do something evil (ha?) to eliminate (perceived) competition or take him out just because he is a pawn unlucky enough to catch Ciel's attention.

For Ciel ... I think this is rather telling about him not having this father. Pardon me for thinking ill of the upper class, but weren't servants regarded in having little to say about just what extent their services lent themselves to a household? Not sure where I'm heading with that. If he'd had his father around, then he'd ask his questions, Pa Phantomhive would take him to a whorehouse, and all the questions would be answered.

An angry devil Sebastian. What will he do next? What will be his course of action now that he's decided to be the Phantomhive butler and nothing more?

I like the story, I really do. I can see it as going into a bizarre romance (In the future? One sided present?) or a purely professional relationship. I think either would be fine, and leave it to your extremely capable hands to see this played out.
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From dojalo08 on June 14, 2011
more please?
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From MeyhamM2 on June 13, 2011
I just wanted to let you know that, although I applaud Zoni's straightforwardness, I disagree with her about Sebastian's characterization in this story. First of all, I find it even harder to imagine Alois and Claude doing ANYTHING sexual, consensual or otherwise. Alois might be an oversexed 13 year-old, but Claude always struck as wanting to have as little to do with him as possible. I don't think Claude really gave two cents about Alois.
And while I do believe that Sebastian and Ciel's relationship is a little more affectionate in comparison, Sebastian is, afterall, a demon. I would not expect him to follow or even acknowledge human morales, such as seeing sex with people below a certain age as taboo. Demons are impulsive beings, but more importantly, rather indestructible. Even if Sebastian did do something taboo in this world, what would he have to fear as a result of it? I just don't see him or his mind as being bound by the same rules humans apply to themselves, as he himself is not human.
I'll admit, I find that disturbing, too. I usually don't like Seb/Ciel fics for that reason... but in this case, the author does not try to make Sebastian seem more human, she does, however, develop his character in a believable way. He is clearly a demon with instinctual urges who has, over the course of time, grown fond for one of his masters/victims/meals. Even he seems rather surprised by it, at first.
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From Sparrowhawk on June 13, 2011
Wow, I totally missed that there was an update! I've been a little busy so I haven't had as much time to check on updates, but I was soooo excited when I realized there was a new chapter! Great portrayal of the change in their relationship and the new game that Sebastian's started. Can't wait to see where all these "little touches" are going and how Ciel reacts to them. Thanks for the new chapter, looking forward to reading more!!
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From zoni on June 12, 2011
I've debated for a while whether or not to leave a review on this story. First off, let me say that I truly admire your writing style. You are a capable and talented author. As a very picky reader, I am truly happy that you use proper grammar and do well with your punctuation. There are too many lazy authors, and it's gratifying to see someone put some effort into a story. It's obvious that you are a talented writer. Our fandom really needs more people like that.

That being said, I honestly have to confess that I really don't care much for your story. With so much potential as a fan author (and I have taken a look at your other stories - wonderful work!), I find it... odd, I guess, that you would write something like this. The plot itself is not bad or offensive. Directly on par with anything in Kuroshitsuji itself, truth be told. That's another thing I like. More, I find your portrayal of the characters to be very disturbing. Sebastian in particular. For multiple reasons. Sebastian is a pretty mysterious character, but writing him up as a creeper pedophile is... out of character. While I was reading through a couple of chapters (most notably chapter fifteen), it felt more like I was reading about Claude and Alois than Sebastian and Ciel. That's not a good thing.

With chapter sixteen, I actually felt like I was getting literary whiplash. You take Creeper Sebby and, after making it pretty clear that there's no romance or affection, try to add in both. It's... more in character than the previous chapters, but it's such a stark contrast that the two don't mesh. Chapter sixteen was lovely. I'd like to see more along those lines from you. It was just a bit of a turn around from the previous chapter.

I actually have had quite a bit of trouble keeping track of your original characters in the story. You occasionally go a few chapters without mentioning them, and I don't really like the fact that I then have to go back and re-read to try and figure out who you were talking about. I do like the characters themselves. I find them intriguing. I just wish I didn't feel the need to go back through and get a refresher course when one is mentioned.

That being said, I will continue to read your updates. While I don't agree with the way you portray Sebastian, it's a real treat to see an author put forward an honest effort on their story. Thank you for adding some quality to our much neglected fandom.
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From ANON - Anon on June 09, 2011
I still love this story (and should have been keeping up with reviews better) but I really don't have much to say, except that all the praise bestowed upon your story is completely accurate. I love seeing your updates, and even occasionally go back to reread chapters while waiting. It's really, really good, and you don't need to worry about expectations not being met, on my part; I'm having a wonderful time just enjoying the ride!
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From MeyhamM2 on June 09, 2011
This story is, so far, the second most thought-provoking thing I've been reading this spring. (The first is The Count of Monte Cristo by Alexandre Dumas, so please don't feel to jealous.) I've realized, today, that what keeps me coming back and checking for new updates is that I have complete trust in you and wherever it is you're taking this story. And honestly, though I haven't the slightest idea where that may be (romance? a separation?), I'm not worried.
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From r0xbuddi on June 09, 2011
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Cuuurious, very curious what's been taking place ...

Itty bitty touches here and there. What's up with that, Seb? Didn't you get a firm reminder to the face the young'un doesn't want you violating him? Ohh, you'll go the seduction route. Allow me to warn you: He's pricklier than a cactus farm (something I image Baldroy would say).

"Sebastian removes a few more unneeded items of crockery"... no kidding. Does he not care for the idea of Ciel marrying? Of him taking another and giving that person his all? Is he displeased that Ciel is thinking of another, and not him?
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From PervyPenguin on June 01, 2011
You have no idea how much I look forward to an update from this story every week. I don't even know how I managed to get through my work days without thinking of the latest chapter. Once again, very well-written and you shouldn't have to worry about letting anyone down, as long as you don't make the pace too fast (which you aren't), have them in character (which you do) and have an actual plot going on (which you do) I'm beyond satisfied.
A little clich� with the massage-bit, but overall, I loved this chapter. Especially how Ciel leads Sebastian into a false sense of security and upright smacks him. I laughed in real life. Now I'm going to be thinking of this chapter while I'm at work until the next one comes out.

I can't wait!
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From Sparrowhawk on June 01, 2011
Loved the new chapter! I like how Sebastian and Ciel were battling even when Ciel wasn't aware of it. Also really liked the end, how Ciel gave him those kisses and then slapped him, and the fact that he rearranged the pieces on the chess board. It's just like him. Can't wait to read more and see what happens between them!! Keep up the good work (: (:
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From MeyhamM2 on June 01, 2011
This review will be rather brief, as I am running out of new things to gush about. Seriously, a flawless chapter. I love Sebastian's dark humor, and that Ciel is still his bitchy self, even though he briefly softened his demeanor to reward Sebastian.

More gushing is to be had at fanfic-cabinet.livejournal.com, home of the fanfic rec list I am creating and on which this story will be appearing, shortly. My decision to even make a rec list was spurred on by this very story, in fact. You've earned every bit of praise that you've gotten, and this story deserves more than just 14 raving reviews... so I want to see that more people read this story.

-Meyham
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From r0xbuddi on June 01, 2011
Haha! Perfect way to skirt the "swooning Ciel syndrome" so popular with today's fiction. I love love LOVE! the way you keep to character. Ciel is very much an aristocrat, so he wouldn't lower himself to a butler in anything but his own terms. Good background information regarding his own sexuality. As Lady Easton noted, he's still very much a child. I think you've got a great way to lead into the next half arc with this new devil and master while opening up this can of worms (or half opening it, and covering it with clear plastic wrap).

Side point: Interesting about Baldroy. Anything there? That's be an excellent un-drawn path to head down ... No? You'd be a revolutionary! : D I'm terribly thrilled you updated! I enjoyed it it immensely.
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From r0xbuddi on May 26, 2011
14. Inflammation

Did you read my last review and though "Let's dangle as close to that chick's review as possible, and then yoink it back, leaving a great plot behind"? I love Sebastian's restraint, and the idea he's exceptional exception among exceptional figures. Fever ... hmmm, it wouldn't do to have the Earl slip away from fever before Sebastian could claim him, no?

Keep it up! You're doing an excellent job! Well thought out AND full of reasonability.
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