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By : Duomi

From animekid on April 16, 2008
this has to be my favorite chapter in tear you apart for the lolz than anything else.

ryuku has a part in this which I love as well as the fact that L is such a seductive kinky hyprocrite.....hmmm....would L even consider using the death note?

There was one fic with an non ooc L using the death note but it was never finished on aff.net and ff.net :(

I just loved the battle (mmm...L should use that style more,) but Law-san's arm is broken >< oh man...something tells me that Kira will use that to write names down or more sadistic smexing.....

probably the smexing.

oh and I am working on tear you apart fanart but since I haven't drawn in about a year, am a procrasinator, and currently working, it might be a while before I actually put it up (like the millions of projects I NEVER finished *grimace*) but I did draw a mock pic so I have an idea what to make.....I have one for GM too but I can't draw two men kissing right ._.;

....is teru going to be in this? If so......that's going to be hilarous (Damn you L; GOD IS MINE!!!!!)
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From ANON - Viridian Kat on April 13, 2008
Still, I'd like to think that Light will come back, will he? What with the Death Note ripped and all (if I were in the series, I'd find some way to destroy it when they brought it back to headquarters and replace it with one of those ones that you can buy at anime conventions). Heh, glad you liked that; I got it from my social teacher when we were discussing idealism and such. One of my author friends (who is too young to go on this site) then mentioned that there was someone like that in her classes. Hates her guts that's what.

And here's a scary thing... my STEP-MOM agrees with Kira's ideals. I asked her this question, and her answer was, "Well isn't that a good thing? Then they can't commit crimes anymore, the world would be a better place." I was totally shocked and moved all the way across the room from her; I could never agree with that. You see, to me, by killing someone who's killed someone else; you're only making yourself exactly who they are. To me it's really that simple.

Kira's childish. That's probably why I don't like him so much.

Ha! You are so lucky! I can't even read past the chapter L dies in, or watch past the episode. I guess the scars are still too real; I get attached to things too easily. It's my biggest problem.

Anyways, I liked it and I hope to see more soon!

Viridian Kat.
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From Hellagoddess on April 10, 2008
Oh! Loved this chapter! All the interaction was just priceless! Poor L with his broken arm and DAMN THAT SHINIGAMI for interrupting! *shakes fist* I liked to much about this chapter that it's hard to know where to start! First off would be L and his Capoeira. I always felt he had the fluidity needed for such movement - and in the series it, how he fought actually reminded me of it quite strongly!

I love Raito just giving him the cake and then going WTF at himself! So adorable! I loved L's ingenious place to hide the Note...

Raito: "Where's the damn notebook, L?!"
L: *spreads arms wide, shrugs and grins lecherously* "Dunno. Search me..."

It gives me all kinds of thoughts :P Everything just seemed so much more easy going - which is something I'm always for. Angst and drama are nice, but it's also good to just lay back and let everything be a little bit more fun (this from a girl who couldn't be serious if she tried...) Glad to hear that you're sorting out future chapters - i'm always such a stickler for that haha, couldn't wing it if I tried...not in the least because making the attempt would be a PLAN to wing it and that is not what WINGING IT is all about!

Why do I want to say wing it so much? Perhaps I need to go and write for a bit...

All in all, great chapter! I'm looking forward to the next one...and the one after that...and the one posted two years from now... (cause you know...you're not allowed to finish this...it's too entertaining...!)

Raito: *swearing under his breath as he tapes his Note back together*
L: "Does Kira-kun need me to wash his mouth out with soap?"
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From ANON - PureFluff on April 09, 2008
GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!

;_; I've been reading fanfics nonstop for like the last week. I read GM a few nights ago (you'll be glad to know that it was one of the major influences in me pulling a random all-nighter) and just found this and quickly read all of it. Now, for the first time in forever, I have to wait for another chapter.

The only disappointing thing about TYA is that you've dedicated FAR too much time to the other characters. Not really, just in my personal 'GET TO TEH LOVERS!' track mind. Overall, it's necessary - I realize this.

The one thing about your writing is that Light always was so much more composed. However, since the secret is out, perhaps he has no reason to be composed around L anymore?

Lol Ryuk got ownt.
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From sharingan on April 09, 2008
So from the last chapter, and portions of this one, it sounds like L is planning to seduce Kira, or at least manipulate him into being more open to him. Seems to be an effective plan so far, although for the moment it probably isn't much more than a stalling tactic. I guess it all depends on the state of the Death Note, especially if L gets his hands on the pieces again, and whether or not Kira physically has some means of continuing to kill. I can never really work out a solution to situations like this, either, since Kira and L's wills are both so strong and so opposed to each other that I just don't see any middle ground, or any way for one of them to convince the other that his way is the right way. But the fun lies in the journey!

I randomly liked L's response "As Kira wishes to believe" in this chapter, perhaps because I've known far too many people like that myself, but it's a very infuriating and effective response if the goal is to irritate someone (which seems to constantly be one of L's motives). I just find myself sympathizing more and more with Kira for being in this situation, with someone like L getting on his nerves. But, wow, he's willing to stoop to some low blows himself as well, with the reminders of the people L has lost. Fights like that do seem to spiral out of control very quickly, and all things considered, I'd say it ended about as well for them as it possibly could have. Very hot, until Ryuk showed up.
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From PlantangelJchan on April 09, 2008
I am most grateful for your confidence in me. I've had a few ideas thus far spinning about in my mind and it's only a matter of time before I choose one and scetch it out into a story. Thank you also for adding the intimate scenes I requested they were yummy ^_^. I find angry sex is just so much better to read and write than mutual coupling. There's an added edge and desperation and less cliche to work with whitch opens the possibility for more origional ideas. Oh and if you don't already have one invest in those little nendoroid figures of the death note cast. They make great little muses when trying to catch the expression of the character while drawing. I just got my L in the mail today and can't stop playing with him....hopefully he doesn't fall apart like the death note did O_O;; Also is it wrong to be an L and own a Death Note? Many have told me that since I am L it is sacriligious to own a Death Note I was wondering your opinion on that as well. Well I'll sign off here as I think I have written about two paragraphs worth in just oen review so keep up the good work and see you next chapter. ^_^.

-L
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From ANON - Lila on April 09, 2008
srry that this wasn't up there but i have a habbit of skimming through the reviews to make sure i am doing mine alright...anyway there was a review about a song called "love me dead" i think the group is called Ludo...It's actually pretty awesome and i think it describes Kira and L perfectly as well :)
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From ANON - Lila on April 09, 2008
OMG!!! Best Chapter yet i was shaking with Laughter through the begining of the Chapter...I think it was soooo CUTE the interactions in the begining were soooo domestic between Kira and L...i couldn't help but imagine them in there little house fighting over cases or some other triviality :)...I'm gonna be honest when Kira couldn't find the Death Note i guessed it was under L's shirt tucked in his pants somewhere...And it was Funny that Kira came to the same conclusion as well. And L turning his wide eyes to him let me know that L realized that Kira had deduced where the Note book was as well...L is sooo KAWAII!!!!...T_T...Anyway onto the fight scene very cool i went to the cite mentioned and i can totally picture that as a fighting style L would have...(Blinks)...Actually that style looks like the move he uses in the second opening for Death Note and his fight with Light in the series...Amazing you found a style that fits him so perfectly Kudos to you!!!!...L was so totally kicking Kira's butt until he got distracted hmph...Looks like Kira was distracted as well...to not realize he was being goaded into a fight by L *grins* I love how their fights always end up in your stories...I've never wanted to hit Ryuk before but he interupted what could have been a very hot and intense Lemon!...he got what he deserved with Kira threatening to take away his apples...I think he looks cool going through the withdrawal symptoms :)...Hmmmm i think this ended with L's Pants still being Undone XD... might we expect some action in the next chapter?...After he has his arm taken care of of course....XD

*on a side note about the Youtube suggestion...My humblest apologies that it interrupted your writing but i thought letting you know of the video would be a good way to repay you for the wonderful story you are creating and yes youtube has a way of pulling you in for hours at a time :) Also i don't know if you stumbled upon the one that had the mika theme music of relax but that's on youtube as well...But you don't have to go see it of you don't want to...When i saw that one of your chapters was entitled relax i chuckled because i pictured the video...:)
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From Kaiyuke on April 09, 2008
That was a really good chapter. XD
I enjoyed the L/Kira interactions immensely and there was a lot of development in characterisation as well as character relationships.
Hee hee, now that the fake rule's been discovered, I wonder what will happen?

Look forward to the next chapter! ;D
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From ANON - Ampicillin on April 08, 2008
"L having a broken arm might give Kira an unfair advantage for a few weeks"

YES! "Goodnight moon" and "Tear you apart" were so good, I read them despite my seme-Light bias. I'm totally chuffed at the idea of some kiraxL lemon being thrown in the mix.

Loving this so far. Sorry I didn't review when I finished reading "goodnight moon" - it was awesome, and I just went straight on into reading this, I couldn't stop myself long enough to write a damn thing.

Keep writing, so we can keep reading. :)
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From BeanBurrito on April 08, 2008
Aaahh!! Damn you Ryuk!!! D:< (Despite my 'WTH RYUK!!' reaction, I like that you addressed he was there instead of pretending he was, ya know... not, lol.)

Wow, aah!, that was an amazing chapter!! The way you write them seems so spot-on and their dialogue and interactions are so interesting. -And not only are your fight scenes outstanding, but the added fight!sex is ugh- Love. I really thought L was going to let Light (err, Kira) top- which I think would be interesting to see how that turned out.

I can't wait for the next chapter!!
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From Dotowe on April 08, 2008
I nearly fell out of my chair laughing when i read your author's note thanking "The Source" and I. I'm still debating the notion of actually telling said "Source" about your AN. It would do massive, wretchedly wondrous things to his ego, and I'm not sure if I could bear it. "The Source" hath wiggled the idea of 'sushi dinner' in front of me nose like cheese to a mouse, so I'm just about off to go to his house for the, er, night.

...Oh, hush. It's sushi and therefore worth it.

I nearly squeed when I read Kira ordering from a Korean joint. KIMCHI FOR THE MASSES!!!!

"It's too bad how everyone you love seems to die." Ah, me. My heart broke when I read that. Remember when I wrote to you about how you made Watari human for me, that you wrote him with flaws and hesitation and now he has a soul? Well, that one single line and L's reaction to it suddenly gave L a soul to me. He's real now, and not just a fun idea. Even in the canon, I loved L because he was a fun idea; but unlike the way I feel about Matt, L was never really all that relatable--despite his tendancies rubbing off on me. Putting his genius mind, carefully controlled emotions, and numerous names and identaties aside, that Kira's cruel, provoking statement actually drove home and caused him to be angry, and his admission for more than respecting Misora as a detective, but also respecting, and even caring for, Misora as a human being, was absolutely wonderful.

There's a song I think of whenever I read your chapters or think of your story, and its called "Love Me Dead". It's fairly new, and I cannot remember the band's name, but for Kira and L's relationship, I think its wonderously perfect. That juxt-supposition between sexual obsession and full out misery is awesome. (Gawd, I hope that didn't just make me sound like nutjob.) But really.

And there's more praising, i assure, you. But i'll email it to you at a later time.

Love the update, adore the length, and I am on the edge of my seat for the next chapter!

Joie,
Gloria
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From ANON - finistelluris on April 08, 2008
And since it keeps hiding my email address: finistelluris@yahoo.de
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From ANON - finistelluris on April 08, 2008
Oi Duomi,
you're really fast! Last time I checked properly, it was just the first chapter... I think it's very difficult to go on writing the story from that point on, but really, I enjoy what I've read so far and the idea of L and Kira on the run together is quite something. Currently, I have no idea where this might be going! :)
Nice capoeira moves, btw, I'd prefer something less stylish and more efficient in that kind of situation ;) I would guess from the anime that the Meia Luia de Compasso is L's trademark kick (if you like, see: http://www.akban.org/wiki/index.php/Meia_Lua_de_compasso that page shows basic techniques very slowly and mostly technically exerted). But anyway, it depends on the capoeira group what it's called and how it is used. I just couldn't resist to comment on it, since I spend most of my freetime trying to learn capoeira ;)
Looking forward to the next chapter!!
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From animekid on April 05, 2008
yay for another chapter *blushes that she found her own review mentioned in this story*

sorry that you are feeling crappy; I hate when I get sick myself (oh man I cannot believe it's april...)

I hated near at first too but I grew to like him >w< I loved Matt/Mello but Mello was sometimes....like me and ran with emotions to a drama like state (oh boy....I used to get pissed off like that.) I read the BB murder cases and I am trying to buy the book.....the whole story shocked the heck out of me.

but this part with L's mind and thoughts was pretty spiffy. I like his ideas of what Kira is and the emotions he has for the man. Ah but man....what is Kira planning?

Personally I love any pairing you would put in this but....papa yagami and Kira would shock me into a heart attack (I heard about this pairing once....just once.) I am hopping Kira and L win at the end and it's not like the manga and it's sudden downfall...*doesn't say any spoilers and coughs* why the hell didn't they put more info on matt dammit.....

Whoa I'm ranting; still I hope you get better and I love this story. I actually read chapters on my breaks at work x.x; random fact: trying to do Near at anime central here in IL with all the goodies >W
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